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by RobMarland » February 17th, 2019, 11:05 am
Hi Alan, Larry,
I only managed to edit the first act over the weekend. I was planning to PL your files while editing, but as it might take me another couple of weekends to finish editing I thought it best to PL your files now. Here are the notes.
I will carry on editing, so it would work best for me if you uploaded your fixes as new files (with "fix" instead of the act number in the filename). Thanks!
As usual, I am restricting fixes to lines where the meaning is altered.
Ingen
Act 1
First line: you say "The Perfect Lady and the Lady Bright", but it should be "The Lady Perfect and the Lady Bright"
1.07 Could you read this one again: "Must love needs be powdered, Lie steeped in brine, or will it not keep sweet?"
Act 2
00.30 You say "hast thou dwelt long With my fair mistress?" but it is "thy fair mistress".
Act 3
01.30 The line is "A man, no woman, that hath gull'd the world" but I think I hear "gilded" instead of "gulled".
02.10 I hear "the love of grief" instead of "the love or grief".
Act 4
First line: The line is "and my land, And what I else possess" but I hear "my hand" instead of "my land".
01.00 It should start "For what hap..." but I hear "But what hap..."
Act 5
00.40 "before God and man She was my wife": I hear "she IS my wife".
Subtle
Act 5
03.50 The bit of Latin was missing: "Cætera quis nescit? lassi requievimus ambo: Proveniant medii sic mihi sæpe dies"
04.45 I hear "Oh, oh, you are catched" instead of "Oh, oh, are you catched?" This is a borderline fix, but since I am asking for other stuff...
The last few lines are missing too, starting at Scene II:
"He has fetch'd her again with coughing."
"And when the parson came to her, she turned
Away, and still let the physician hold
Her by the hand."
"How now?!"
"I'll not meddle with you, sir."
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RobMarland on February 17th, 2019, 11:10 am, edited 3 times in total.
really all are excellent players for their selected roles and the editing together is very craftily done.