EDITING[Play] Lady Huntworth's Experiment by RC Carton-mtf

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Post by wib66 » April 18th, 2021, 2:11 pm

PL Notes Crayll Act 1

Missing line
4:26 How about the whiskey?

Acts 2 and 3 are PL OK thanks

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Post by wib66 » April 20th, 2021, 11:40 am

UPRG11W has agreed to PL my narrator files. Thank you

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Post by UPRG11W » April 22nd, 2021, 11:09 am

PL note:

I listened to this 37:23 recording, Narrator for Act I. I might understand inaccurately therefore my feedback is just for your consideration. Many thanks for your trust!

1:46 - 2:17 repeated "After the curtain rises Thorsby enters at gate L. I. E., looks at French window"
1:41 - 1:43 missing STAGE DIRECTION "Center" before "Rises"
6:04 missing STAGE DIRECTION "crosses up C. to house to see if they have been seen" before "Thor. (turning towards her)"
6:18 - 6:24 missing "Lucy" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Lucy. (crosses round and sits on tree seat R.)"
6:58 - 7:00 extra "Thor. (takes hat" between two STAGE DIRECTION "rising with Lucy" and "he looks in wonder"
11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Mr. Pillenger hands them"
14:54 missing STAGE DIRECTION "as they say in the House of Commons" between two STAGE DIRECTION "Miss Pillenger glares at Dorvaston" and "Pillenger looks at him"
16:02 - 16:04 repeated "Caroline" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Caroline turns and looks at him"
16:32 - 16:39 voice glitches in the STAGE DIRECTION "exit into kitchen; Dorvaston rises, looks after her U. B."
22:33 - 22:35 repeated "Dor. (long puzzled look)"
24:03 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (coming C.) "
26:20 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "(Dorvaston enters with large orchid.)"
26:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (rising) "
27:21 missing Car. in "Car. (pausing) "
34:38 - 34:40 repeated "he puts down cigar ..."
35:48 - 35:50 repeated "finding it out ..."
36:57 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (reads)"

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 20th, 2021, 11:40 am
UPRG11W has agreed to PL my narrator files. Thank you

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Post by UPRG11W » April 22nd, 2021, 12:33 pm

PL note:

I listened to this 33:29 recording, Narrator for Act II.

I am slowly educated, into 18-minute of the recording, I start to realize that you might have INTENTIONALLY avoided a 3-5 second silence between two STAGE DIRECTION if the two STAGE DIRECTION immediately follow one another in the way that one is at the end of one paragraph and another is at the beginning of the following paragraph.
Thus there are only two spots I wish you may have a look at. The rest spots for the "3-5 second silence" are still listed here but I doubt it is necessary for you to look at them.

13:30 - 13:32 repeated "Gan. (goes" in "Gan. (goes slowly up stage, pauses, turns—is about to speak, thinks better of it)"
32:49 missing "turns out gas", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence, before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (in an amazed whisper)"

3:14 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Kez. (fingering top of chair L.) "
3:47 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Gan. (speaking sadly)"
4:44 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (puts cloth on table, crosses to mantel and gets matches off bracket)"
6:48 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (to Keziah)"
7:59 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Kez. (meekly)"
10:31 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (crosses to top of table)"
11:26 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Pil. (turning at garden door)"
11:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (following)"
13:04 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Gan. (comes down to chair R.)"
15:31 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Cray. (at window)"
15:48 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Cray. (looking round kitchen)"

Regards,
Jessie

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Post by UPRG11W » April 22nd, 2021, 1:23 pm

PL note:

I listened to this 26:13 recording, Narrator for Act III. Here is the feedback.

11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Miss Pillenger enters L." in "(Dorvaston strolls out through the window and off R. Miss Pillenger enters L., Gandy giving way)"
11:52 - 11:54 repeated "crosses to" in "(crosses to window up back. Gandy goes up stairs)"
12:05 - 12:07 repeated "comes to top" in "(he crosses to L. and indicates to Dorvaston that Miss Pillenger is in the room. Dorvaston throws cigarette away and comes to top of chair R. C.)"
16:56 missing "pause", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence before the next STAGE DIRECTION "(sits)"
25:26 missing "kisses her", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence before the next STAGE DIRECTION "(kisses her—runs up steps)"

Regards,
Jessie

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Post by wib66 » April 22nd, 2021, 1:52 pm

THank you so much for PL ing I will get to the edits at the weekend many thanks

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Post by wib66 » April 24th, 2021, 1:53 am

UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 11:09 am
PL note:

I listened to this 37:23 recording, Narrator for Act I. I might understand inaccurately therefore my feedback is just for your consideration. Many thanks for your trust!

1:46 - 2:17 repeated "After the curtain rises Thorsby enters at gate L. I. E., looks at French window"this has been removed
1:41 - 1:43 missing STAGE DIRECTION "Center" before "Rises"this is not needed
6:04 missing STAGE DIRECTION "crosses up C. to house to see if they have been seen" before "Thor. (turning towards her)"this has been added
6:18 - 6:24 missing "Lucy" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Lucy. (crosses round and sits on tree seat R.)"
6:58 - 7:00 extra "Thor. (takes hat" between two STAGE DIRECTION "rising with Lucy" and "he looks in wonder"this has been removed
11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Mr. Pillenger hands them"this has been removed
14:54 missing STAGE DIRECTION "as they say in the House of Commons" between two STAGE DIRECTION "Miss Pillenger glares at Dorvaston" and "Pillenger looks at him"this is read by the character
16:02 - 16:04 repeated "Caroline" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Caroline turns and looks at him"this has been removed
16:32 - 16:39 voice glitches in the STAGE DIRECTION "exit into kitchen; Dorvaston rises, looks after her U. B." replaced
22:33 - 22:35 repeated "Dor. (long puzzled look)"removed
24:03 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (coming C.) " this is not needed as it read straight after the previous stage direction
26:20 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "(Dorvaston enters with large orchid.)"this is not needed
26:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (rising) "
27:21 missing Car. in "Car. (pausing) "this has been added
34:38 - 34:40 repeated "he puts down cigar ..."this has been removed
35:48 - 35:50 repeated "finding it out ..." this has been removed
36:57 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (reads)"this is not needed

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 20th, 2021, 11:40 am
UPRG11W has agreed to PL my narrator files. Thank you
Thank you for your very thorough PL ing I have now edited and reuploaded Act 1 for a spot PL
https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_01_128kb.mp3

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Post by wib66 » April 24th, 2021, 2:00 am

UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 12:33 pm
PL note:

I listened to this 33:29 recording, Narrator for Act II.

I am slowly educated, into 18-minute of the recording, I start to realize that you might have INTENTIONALLY avoided a 3-5 second silence between two STAGE DIRECTION if the two STAGE DIRECTION immediately follow one another in the way that one is at the end of one paragraph and another is at the beginning of the following paragraph.
Thus there are only two spots I wish you may have a look at. The rest spots for the "3-5 second silence" are still listed here but I doubt it is necessary for you to look at them.

13:30 - 13:32 repeated "Gan. (goes" in "Gan. (goes slowly up stage, pauses, turns—is about to speak, thinks better of it)"removed
32:49 missing "turns out gas", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence, before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (in an amazed whisper)"added in

3:14 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Kez. (fingering top of chair L.) "
3:47 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Gan. (speaking sadly)"
4:44 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (puts cloth on table, crosses to mantel and gets matches off bracket)"
6:48 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (to Keziah)"
7:59 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Kez. (meekly)"
10:31 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (crosses to top of table)"
11:26 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Pil. (turning at garden door)"
11:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (following)"
13:04 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Gan. (comes down to chair R.)"
15:31 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Cray. (at window)"
15:48 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Cray. (looking round kitchen)"

Regards,
Jessie
Thank you for your PL as you say the silence does not need adding as the stage directions follow on from each other. This has now been edited and reuploaded thanks

https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_02_128kb.mp3

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Post by wib66 » April 24th, 2021, 2:17 am

UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 1:23 pm
PL note:

I listened to this 26:13 recording, Narrator for Act III. Here is the feedback.

11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Miss Pillenger enters L." in "(Dorvaston strolls out through the window and off R. Miss Pillenger enters L., Gandy giving way)"removed
11:52 - 11:54 repeated "crosses to" in "(crosses to window up back. Gandy goes up stairs)"removed
12:05 - 12:07 repeated "comes to top" in "(he crosses to L. and indicates to Dorvaston that Miss Pillenger is in the room. Dorvaston throws cigarette away and comes to top of chair R. C.)"removed
16:56 missing "pause", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence before the next STAGE DIRECTION "(sits)"I don't need this as I will put a pause in the file when I edit
25:26 missing "kisses her", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence before the next STAGE DIRECTION "(kisses her—runs up steps)"added

Regards,
Jessie
Thank you for your PL this is now edited and reuploaded ready for a spot PL thanks

https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_03_128kb.mp3

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Post by UPRG11W » April 24th, 2021, 5:18 pm

PL note:

This 36:51 recording, Narrator for Act I, is perfect for PL OK.

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 1:53 am
UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 11:09 am
PL note:

I listened to this 37:23 recording, Narrator for Act I. I might understand inaccurately therefore my feedback is just for your consideration. Many thanks for your trust!

1:46 - 2:17 repeated "After the curtain rises Thorsby enters at gate L. I. E., looks at French window"this has been removed
1:41 - 1:43 missing STAGE DIRECTION "Center" before "Rises"this is not needed
6:04 missing STAGE DIRECTION "crosses up C. to house to see if they have been seen" before "Thor. (turning towards her)"this has been added
6:18 - 6:24 missing "Lucy" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Lucy. (crosses round and sits on tree seat R.)"
6:58 - 7:00 extra "Thor. (takes hat" between two STAGE DIRECTION "rising with Lucy" and "he looks in wonder"this has been removed
11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Mr. Pillenger hands them"this has been removed
14:54 missing STAGE DIRECTION "as they say in the House of Commons" between two STAGE DIRECTION "Miss Pillenger glares at Dorvaston" and "Pillenger looks at him"this is read by the character
16:02 - 16:04 repeated "Caroline" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Caroline turns and looks at him"this has been removed
16:32 - 16:39 voice glitches in the STAGE DIRECTION "exit into kitchen; Dorvaston rises, looks after her U. B." replaced
22:33 - 22:35 repeated "Dor. (long puzzled look)"removed
24:03 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (coming C.) " this is not needed as it read straight after the previous stage direction
26:20 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "(Dorvaston enters with large orchid.)"this is not needed
26:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (rising) "
27:21 missing Car. in "Car. (pausing) "this has been added
34:38 - 34:40 repeated "he puts down cigar ..."this has been removed
35:48 - 35:50 repeated "finding it out ..." this has been removed
36:57 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (reads)"this is not needed

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 20th, 2021, 11:40 am
UPRG11W has agreed to PL my narrator files. Thank you
Thank you for your very thorough PL ing I have now edited and reuploaded Act 1 for a spot PL
https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_01_128kb.mp3

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Post by UPRG11W » April 24th, 2021, 5:23 pm

PL note:

This 33:28 recording, Narrator for Act II, is perfect for PL OK.

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 2:00 am
UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 12:33 pm
PL note:

I listened to this 33:29 recording, Narrator for Act II.

I am slowly educated, into 18-minute of the recording, I start to realize that you might have INTENTIONALLY avoided a 3-5 second silence between two STAGE DIRECTION if the two STAGE DIRECTION immediately follow one another in the way that one is at the end of one paragraph and another is at the beginning of the following paragraph.
Thus there are only two spots I wish you may have a look at. The rest spots for the "3-5 second silence" are still listed here but I doubt it is necessary for you to look at them.

13:30 - 13:32 repeated "Gan. (goes" in "Gan. (goes slowly up stage, pauses, turns—is about to speak, thinks better of it)"removed
32:49 missing "turns out gas", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence, before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (in an amazed whisper)"added in

3:14 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Kez. (fingering top of chair L.) "
3:47 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Gan. (speaking sadly)"
4:44 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (puts cloth on table, crosses to mantel and gets matches off bracket)"
6:48 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (to Keziah)"
7:59 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Kez. (meekly)"
10:31 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (crosses to top of table)"
11:26 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Pil. (turning at garden door)"
11:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Dor. (following)"
13:04 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Gan. (comes down to chair R.)"
15:31 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Cray. (at window)"
15:48 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Cray. (looking round kitchen)"

Regards,
Jessie
Thank you for your PL as you say the silence does not need adding as the stage directions follow on from each other. This has now been edited and reuploaded thanks

https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_02_128kb.mp3

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Post by UPRG11W » April 24th, 2021, 5:38 pm

PL note:

This 26:06 recording, Narrator for Act III, is perfect for PL OK.

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 2:17 am
UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 1:23 pm
PL note:

I listened to this 26:13 recording, Narrator for Act III. Here is the feedback.

11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Miss Pillenger enters L." in "(Dorvaston strolls out through the window and off R. Miss Pillenger enters L., Gandy giving way)"removed
11:52 - 11:54 repeated "crosses to" in "(crosses to window up back. Gandy goes up stairs)"removed
12:05 - 12:07 repeated "comes to top" in "(he crosses to L. and indicates to Dorvaston that Miss Pillenger is in the room. Dorvaston throws cigarette away and comes to top of chair R. C.)"removed
16:56 missing "pause", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence before the next STAGE DIRECTION "(sits)"I don't need this as I will put a pause in the file when I edit
25:26 missing "kisses her", which is supposed to be followed by a 3-5 second silence before the next STAGE DIRECTION "(kisses her—runs up steps)"added

Regards,
Jessie
Thank you for your PL this is now edited and reuploaded ready for a spot PL thanks

https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_03_128kb.mp3

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Post by UPRG11W » April 24th, 2021, 6:31 pm

PL note:

Sorry again about your new editions. The Narrator for Act I from MW, which is 36:44, instead of 36:51, is good for PL OK to me.
I guess you want to keep the new version that is linked in MW (36:44), not the new link in this message (36:51). (even though both versions seem perfect to me ^_^)

I also double-checked the other two Acts, lucky that the links in MW and the links in your response messages of this forum are consistent for Act II and for Act III.

Regards,
Jessie
UPRG11W wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 5:18 pm
PL note:

This 36:51 recording, Narrator for Act I, is perfect for PL OK.

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 1:53 am
UPRG11W wrote:
April 22nd, 2021, 11:09 am
PL note:

I listened to this 37:23 recording, Narrator for Act I. I might understand inaccurately therefore my feedback is just for your consideration. Many thanks for your trust!

1:46 - 2:17 repeated "After the curtain rises Thorsby enters at gate L. I. E., looks at French window"this has been removed
1:41 - 1:43 missing STAGE DIRECTION "Center" before "Rises"this is not needed
6:04 missing STAGE DIRECTION "crosses up C. to house to see if they have been seen" before "Thor. (turning towards her)"this has been added
6:18 - 6:24 missing "Lucy" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Lucy. (crosses round and sits on tree seat R.)"
6:58 - 7:00 extra "Thor. (takes hat" between two STAGE DIRECTION "rising with Lucy" and "he looks in wonder"this has been removed
11:41 - 11:45 repeated "Mr. Pillenger hands them"this has been removed
14:54 missing STAGE DIRECTION "as they say in the House of Commons" between two STAGE DIRECTION "Miss Pillenger glares at Dorvaston" and "Pillenger looks at him"this is read by the character
16:02 - 16:04 repeated "Caroline" in the STAGE DIRECTION "Caroline turns and looks at him"this has been removed
16:32 - 16:39 voice glitches in the STAGE DIRECTION "exit into kitchen; Dorvaston rises, looks after her U. B." replaced
22:33 - 22:35 repeated "Dor. (long puzzled look)"removed
24:03 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (coming C.) " this is not needed as it read straight after the previous stage direction
26:20 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "(Dorvaston enters with large orchid.)"this is not needed
26:38 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (rising) "
27:21 missing Car. in "Car. (pausing) "this has been added
34:38 - 34:40 repeated "he puts down cigar ..."this has been removed
35:48 - 35:50 repeated "finding it out ..." this has been removed
36:57 missing a 3-5 second silence before the STAGE DIRECTION "Car. (reads)"this is not needed

Regards,
Jessie
Thank you for your very thorough PL ing I have now edited and reuploaded Act 1 for a spot PL
https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_01_128kb.mp3

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Post by silverquill » April 24th, 2021, 9:03 pm

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Post by wib66 » April 25th, 2021, 12:41 am

UPRG11W wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 6:31 pm
PL note:

Sorry again about your new editions. The Narrator for Act I from MW, which is 36:44, instead of 36:51, is good for PL OK to me.
I guess you want to keep the new version that is linked in MW (36:44), not the new link in this message (36:51). (even though both versions seem perfect to me ^_^)

I also double-checked the other two Acts, lucky that the links in MW and the links in your response messages of this forum are consistent for Act II and for Act III.

Regards,
Jessie
UPRG11W wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 5:18 pm
PL note:

This 36:51 recording, Narrator for Act I, is perfect for PL OK.

Regards,
Jessie
wib66 wrote:
April 24th, 2021, 1:53 am

Thank you for your very thorough PL ing I have now edited and reuploaded Act 1 for a spot PL
https://librivox.org/uploads/mightyfelix/ladyhuntsworth_narrator_01_128kb.mp3
Hi the links automatically update in the MW when you upload the new file as long as it has the same filename. I just like to post them in the thread so PL'ers don't have to go searching for them in the MW. Many thanks for all your help very much appreciated.

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