[fiction] The Storm Of London by Fernande Blaze de Bury - rap

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Post by Rapunzelina » January 28th, 2021, 6:05 pm


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Post by Kalamareader » January 28th, 2021, 9:08 pm

Rapunzelina wrote:
January 28th, 2021, 6:05 pm
Thank you! I have uploaded https://librivox.org/uploads/rapunzelina/stormoflondon_01_blazedebury_128kb.mp3

Duration 23:34
Very well read, but a few things that you might look at:

At about 4:31.5 there is a repeat.

12:41 "He had for such a long time ...." You left out the word “such”. I think that it kind of adds to the meaning of the sentence.

13:48 "and he longed to escape the routine of London life" I heard longs

14:52 "He returned to England on sick leave," I heard returns

21:13 "and he heard that haunting whisper in his wearied ears that," I heard eyes.

22:01 "which seemed to narrow the horizon of life." I heard seems

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Post by miss stav » January 29th, 2021, 2:16 am

Thank you both. Raponzelina, would you like to continue with chapter 2?
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Post by GJConover » January 29th, 2021, 1:52 pm

CLAIM chapters 2, 3, 4, and 5

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Post by miss stav » January 29th, 2021, 2:11 pm

Sure. All yours. Have fun.
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Post by Rapunzelina » January 30th, 2021, 10:40 am

Thank you, Stav! I could continue with chapter 6, if I may?

I have updated chapter 1: https://librivox.org/uploads/rapunzelina/stormoflondon_01_blazedebury_128kb.mp3
New duration: 23:31

For spot-check:
4:31 removed repeat
12:37 added "such"
21:12 added "ears"

Regarding the rest, it must be my accent on the combination of the ed+to sounds, because I say the correct text. I attempted a fix, but consciously trying to say it actually makes it sound worse, so I left it as is. Thanks!

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Post by Kalamareader » January 30th, 2021, 12:51 pm

Rapunzelina wrote:
January 30th, 2021, 10:40 am
Thank you, Stav! I could continue with chapter 6, if I may?

I have updated chapter 1: https://librivox.org/uploads/rapunzelina/stormoflondon_01_blazedebury_128kb.mp3
New duration: 23:31

For spot-check:
4:31 removed repeat
12:37 added "such"
21:12 added "ears"

Regarding the rest, it must be my accent on the combination of the ed+to sounds, because I say the correct text. I attempted a fix, but consciously trying to say it actually makes it sound worse, so I left it as is. Thanks!
Great job. Yes, I am sure it is the 'accent'. I listened to many other "ed" endings in your narration, but didn't catch that all of the ones I noted were "ed+to" combinations. I will be sure and watch for those from now on and not say they are "wrong" :oops: .

Looking forward to Chapter 6. :D

Chapter 1 PLOK :thumbs:

Very strange opening to a story. I am curious how this thing progresses.
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Post by GJConover » January 30th, 2021, 12:54 pm


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Post by Kalamareader » January 30th, 2021, 1:02 pm

Stav or Rapunzelina,

Question: Should I, after PLOKing a reading, change the 'pages' to 'recording time' in the Notes column of the MW?

Thanks,

Wayne
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Post by miss stav » January 30th, 2021, 2:07 pm

Thank you all. I see the mw as a collective responceibility. So if you pl- ok a reading and I did not get around to entering a chapter, please enter it and mark it pl- ok including changing the notes section, entering the link, and marking pl- ok. There is no reason it should fall only on one person when we are a team.
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Post by Kalamareader » January 30th, 2021, 2:20 pm

GJConover wrote:
January 30th, 2021, 12:54 pm
Chapter 2 is uploaded:
https://librivox.org/uploads/rapunzelina/stormoflondon_02_debury_128kb.mp3 26:31
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Hi there,

I found a few things that need your attention:

At the beginning, only .5 to one second silent time at the beginning of the recording.

In the one plus seconds at the beginning, there is a lot of noise. You can probably just cut that out and come close to the correct time.

1:09 A long empty space. In a recording, long 'empty' spaces can often break up the flow of the story. Also, at this place there is a lot of noise just before you start speaking again. Can you clean that up when shortening the voiceless area?

2:01 Another long gap.

2:54.5 Well, I don’t! I am blowed if I can make this out, or if I know what I am going to do. I heard “...of if I know what is going on.”

4:04 Another long gap

4:15 “Grosvenor” is pronounced “Grove-nur”. We aren't too picky about pronunciations of words, but if you are reading about a country that you don't know well, and come across a word you don't know, it is often a good idea to do a little internet searching to see if you can find out how to pronounce it.


4:52 “There were few of his lady friends he would recognise again in this new garb”. There are quite a few errors in this sentence. Best to redo this entire sentence.

4:59 Another long gap in the middle of the sentence.

5:00 After his tub and breakfast he felt in buoyant spirits and physically fit, I heard foot.

5:27 Another long gap and a lot of noise.

8:24.5 “But in vain did he endeavour to do so,” The beginning of this sentence needs to be rerecorded.

10:15 was it likely that the Admiral, the Field-Marshal, the latest V.C. would ever venture beyond their bed-rug—oh! that even was gone . The middle of this sentence is really muddled. Probably should be redone.

Starting at about 1:58 through 12:06 there is quite a bit of background noise.

15:44 “...willingly retired into modest seclusion.” “modest" is lost, also there is a long gap before 'seclusion'.

17:16 another gap

17:17 “as the Bishop of Sunbury had said at Islington… Islington is pronounced Is-ling-tun.

23:59 Another long gap
At the end, you should have only 5 seconds of silence

Also, throughout the whole recording there is a lot of background noise, a kind of hum. It might help if you ran it through a noise reduction again.

Very interesting story. Looking forward to hearing more.

Wayne
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Post by johnb2 » January 30th, 2021, 4:58 pm

Hi Stav

chapter 20 please

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Post by miss stav » January 30th, 2021, 5:35 pm

Sure. A very tuching chapter it is...
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Post by GJConover » January 31st, 2021, 7:43 am


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Post by miss stav » January 31st, 2021, 7:46 am

Thanks a lot. Please notice the pl notes for chapter 2.
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