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mightyfelix
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Post by mightyfelix » July 23rd, 2017, 3:15 pm

Thanks, Cari! Looking forward to hearing it. :thumbs:
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by CariJS » July 25th, 2017, 8:41 pm


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Post by mightyfelix » July 25th, 2017, 9:19 pm

Great! I'll have a listen tomorrow. :)
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by mightyfelix » July 26th, 2017, 5:06 pm

Well done on chapter 22, Cari. Just a couple of notes:
  • At about 3:57, the text is, "The man lifted his grey deep set eyes..." and I'm sure that this is what you read, but listening, without the text in front of me, it sounded like, "The man looked at his grey deep set eyes..." which was confusing to me. Might it be possible to re-record this part to make sure it is clear? I hope this doesn't verge on the realm of unsolicited feedback, but I only mention it because it was unclear to me who was doing what.
  • At 8:07-8:32, there are multiple repeats of "No, again, nothing must be left to chance." (If I get a vote, I prefer the first one. :wink: )
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by CariJS » July 26th, 2017, 5:13 pm

mightyfelix wrote:Well done on chapter 22, Cari. Just a couple of notes:
  • At about 3:57, the text is, "The man lifted his grey deep set eyes..." and I'm sure that this is what you read, but listening, without the text in front of me, it sounded like, "The man looked at his grey deep set eyes..." which was confusing to me. Might it be possible to re-record this part to make sure it is clear? I hope this doesn't verge on the realm of unsolicited feedback, but I only mention it because it was unclear to me who was doing what.
  • At 8:07-8:32, there are multiple repeats of "No, again, nothing must be left to chance." (If I get a vote, I prefer the first one. :wink: )
No problem! I love feedback!

I will amend that and take out the repeats. I've been having issues with Audacity saving my edits (so frustrating), so I think I need to do a final listen through of the mp3 prior to submitting.

I should have those done by tomorrow :)

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Post by mightyfelix » July 26th, 2017, 5:25 pm

CariJS wrote:I've been having issues with Audacity saving my edits (so frustrating), so I think I need to do a final listen through of the mp3 prior to submitting.
No need! That's what PL'ers are for! Save that time and use it for something else... Like more recording! :wink:
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by larryhayes7 » July 26th, 2017, 7:05 pm


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Post by CariJS » July 26th, 2017, 8:35 pm


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Post by mightyfelix » July 26th, 2017, 9:26 pm

larryhayes7 wrote:chapter 20 completed


https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3

time 11:20
Thank you! A couple of small notes:
  • At 0:29, you said, "Chapter 20. The Persecution." The chapter title is just "Persecution", without "The". I don't actually know if this is the kind of thing that really matters, but because it's kind of included in the intro/disclaimer, I thought I'd mention it.
  • At the end, you said, "End of Chapter." It should be "End of Chapter 20."
That's it!
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by mightyfelix » July 26th, 2017, 9:29 pm

CariJS wrote:OK, edits on Chapter 22 complete

29:44

https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_22_holborn_128kb.mp3
PL ok! Also, I just now realized that I gave you much too wide a time signature for that second edit. Sorry about that, but clearly you found it anyway! Great job!
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by CariJS » July 27th, 2017, 8:58 am

mightyfelix wrote: PL ok! Also, I just now realized that I gave you much too wide a time signature for that second edit. Sorry about that, but clearly you found it anyway! Great job!
No worries at all! There were other very minor edits missing in that section, so the range was helpful :)


-Cari

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Post by larryhayes7 » July 27th, 2017, 12:34 pm

mightyfelix wrote:
larryhayes7 wrote:chapter 20 completed


https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3

time 11:20
Thank you! A couple of small notes:
  • At 0:29, you said, "Chapter 20. The Persecution." The chapter title is just "Persecution", without "The". I don't actually know if this is the kind of thing that really matters, but because it's kind of included in the intro/disclaimer, I thought I'd mention it.
  • At the end, you said, "End of Chapter." It should be "End of Chapter 20."
That's it!
Chapter 20 corrected version

https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3
Time 11:20

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Post by mightyfelix » July 27th, 2017, 6:59 pm

larryhayes7 wrote: Chapter 20 corrected version

https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3
Time 11:20
Intro is perfect, but now the ending has both "End of chapter" and "End of chapter 20". Please remove "End of Chapter."

Thanks!
Devorah Allen

Journal of Francis Asbury Traveling preacher in fledgling America
The Crook in the Lot Faith in the midst of difficulties
The Voyages of Doctor Dolittle Dramatic Reading
Insect Adventures Children's NF (US or Life+50 only)

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Post by larryhayes7 » July 27th, 2017, 7:09 pm

mightyfelix wrote:
larryhayes7 wrote: Chapter 20 corrected version

https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3
Time 11:20
Intro is perfect, but now the ending has both "End of chapter" and "End of chapter 20". Please remove "End of Chapter."

Thanks!
OHGosh! I am so sorry, going to fix now :( :oops:

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Post by larryhayes7 » July 27th, 2017, 7:25 pm

mightyfelix wrote:
larryhayes7 wrote: Chapter 20 corrected version

https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3
Time 11:20
Intro is perfect, but now the ending has both "End of chapter" and "End of chapter 20". Please remove "End of Chapter."

Thanks!

https://librivox.org/uploads/kathrinee/childofthemoat_20_holborn_128kb.mp3
Time 11:17

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