[group]Coffee Break Collection #29 - DOGS - lt

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Post by grant007love » October 8th, 2020, 1:55 pm

Thank you for the feedback msfry.
I will re-record and before I do so refresh the page with the link (good tip). It appeared to be old text and hopefully I can recapture the humor - it might even be better reading another time.
-Grant

msfry wrote:
September 25th, 2020, 12:24 pm
PL Notes A Dog Day

Hi Grant, what an unusual and delightful story! You did a great job bringing out the humor. Alas, I have a few notes for you to attend to:

4:23 missing word: "Memo: to take it out of her kittens later."
9:08 missing text, and two time errors: You read 8:10 and 8:20, but it really is 8:01, followed by 8:02, then you skip 8:05 thru 8:30, and pick up again at 8:40.

8:1.
Ravenous.
8:2.
Have one of the nicest pieces of coal I have ever
come across.
8:5.
Nose around the kitchen floor, and glean a bit of
onion, an imitation tortoise-shell comb, a shrimp
(almost entire), an abominably stale chunk of
bread, and about half a yard of capital string.
After coal, I think I like string best. The family
have noticed what a lot of this I stow away, and
it was not a bad idea of young Mr. Brown’s, the
other day, that, if I had the end of a piece of
string always hanging from my mouth, they could
use me as a string-box. Though it is scarcely a
matter for joking about. Still, it made me laugh.
8:30.
If one had to rely on other people one might
starve. Fortunately, in the hall I happen on the
treacle-pudding, and I get first look in. Lap up
the treacle, and leave the suet for the family.

8:40.
Down into the kitchen again. Sit by the fire,
and pretend I don’t know what treacle is like.

Outro: End of A Dog Day, A is missing.
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TIP: I'm betting you didn't follow along with the text on your final PL of your file, or you would surely have noticed the missing text above. Is that right? Some readers rely on PL'ers to discover such errors. However, be aware that not all PLers follow along with the text, so they wouldn't catch the missing text either. I always follow along, on my own and other readers' files. I don't want any authors gazing at me from above and smacking their foreheads in horror at my mussing with their story.

TIP #2 For some weird reason, text sometimes goes missing from a gutenberg project. It's there when you record it, and not there when you proof it, or vice versa. Same link, same story. So I ALWAYS refresh a gutenberg page every time I use it. Like I clicked on your link, and then when it opened I refreshed the page. It's one of those "mysteries" I don't bother to try and figure out. I just pass the suggestion along.

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Post by grant007love » October 8th, 2020, 3:16 pm

Here is my re-recording. 11m56s. Thank you for the pointers.

https://librivox.org/uploads/lynnet/cbc29_adogday_gl_128kb.mp3

-Grant

grant007love wrote:
October 8th, 2020, 1:55 pm
Thank you for the feedback msfry.
I will re-record and before I do so refresh the page with the link (good tip). It appeared to be old text and hopefully I can recapture the humor - it might even be better reading another time.
-Grant

msfry wrote:
September 25th, 2020, 12:24 pm
PL Notes A Dog Day

Hi Grant, what an unusual and delightful story! You did a great job bringing out the humor. Alas, I have a few notes for you to attend to:

4:23 missing word: "Memo: to take it out of her kittens later."
9:08 missing text, and two time errors: You read 8:10 and 8:20, but it really is 8:01, followed by 8:02, then you skip 8:05 thru 8:30, and pick up again at 8:40.

8:1.
Ravenous.
8:2.
Have one of the nicest pieces of coal I have ever
come across.
8:5.
Nose around the kitchen floor, and glean a bit of
onion, an imitation tortoise-shell comb, a shrimp
(almost entire), an abominably stale chunk of
bread, and about half a yard of capital string.
After coal, I think I like string best. The family
have noticed what a lot of this I stow away, and
it was not a bad idea of young Mr. Brown’s, the
other day, that, if I had the end of a piece of
string always hanging from my mouth, they could
use me as a string-box. Though it is scarcely a
matter for joking about. Still, it made me laugh.
8:30.
If one had to rely on other people one might
starve. Fortunately, in the hall I happen on the
treacle-pudding, and I get first look in. Lap up
the treacle, and leave the suet for the family.

8:40.
Down into the kitchen again. Sit by the fire,
and pretend I don’t know what treacle is like.

Outro: End of A Dog Day, A is missing.
------------------------------------------------------------------
TIP: I'm betting you didn't follow along with the text on your final PL of your file, or you would surely have noticed the missing text above. Is that right? Some readers rely on PL'ers to discover such errors. However, be aware that not all PLers follow along with the text, so they wouldn't catch the missing text either. I always follow along, on my own and other readers' files. I don't want any authors gazing at me from above and smacking their foreheads in horror at my mussing with their story.

TIP #2 For some weird reason, text sometimes goes missing from a gutenberg project. It's there when you record it, and not there when you proof it, or vice versa. Same link, same story. So I ALWAYS refresh a gutenberg page every time I use it. Like I clicked on your link, and then when it opened I refreshed the page. It's one of those "mysteries" I don't bother to try and figure out. I just pass the suggestion along.

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Post by msfry » October 8th, 2020, 4:15 pm

No need to re-record, Grant. Just splice in the missing text, and you'll be all set. :D

EDIT: Oops, looks like I sent this too late! I will listen soon.
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Post by msfry » October 9th, 2020, 7:17 am

A Dog Day is PL OK. Yes, even better! :D
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Post by msfry » October 9th, 2020, 7:27 am

Yaller is PL OK. How in the world can we explain how these special dogs behave? Can't. They are just "amazing".
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Post by msfry » October 9th, 2020, 8:01 am

PL Notes for The Cur Dog

3:50 the dog held him, you say "the log held him", because that is how it is printed!!!!! Alas, OCR texts often misinterpret characters, and we have to be on the lookout for and correct them.
Outro: Please add 4 seconds of silence. (This is to prevent certain audio players from cutting the story off prematurely.)
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