The time on that one is 1:21, not enough coffee this morning lol.dfrakk wrote: ↑September 14th, 2019, 6:40 am My contribution for this week....
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COMPLETE [Fortnightly Poem] The Indian Serenade, by Percy Bysshe Shelley - dl
Frank, please upload your poem again with the correct file name as shown in the first post:dfrakk wrote: ↑September 14th, 2019, 6:40 am My contribution for this week....
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(replace dreamsofthee with indianseranade), and please notate the file length.
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David and Bill, your renditions are PL OK. Thank you.
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https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/indianseranade_shelley_fd_128kb.mp3 length - 1:21msfry wrote: ↑September 14th, 2019, 6:50 amFrank, please upload your poem again with the correct file name as shown in the first post:dfrakk wrote: ↑September 14th, 2019, 6:40 am My contribution for this week....
https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/dreamsofthee_shelley_fd_128kb.mp3
(replace dreamsofthee with indianseranade), and please notate the file length.
Apologies for that, must not be fully awake yet.
Thanks, Frank. You are PL OK.
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Another dream . . . . just to get you out of the dismal swamp
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Michele,
I looked around to clarify the punctuation in the poem, and everywhere I could see "the champak odors fail" (not fall).
Any comment?
Thanks!
I looked around to clarify the punctuation in the poem, and everywhere I could see "the champak odors fail" (not fall).
Any comment?
Thanks!
tovarisch
- reality prompts me to scale down my reading, sorry to say
to PLers: do correct my pronunciation please
Looks like you found a third misspelling in the original poem I quoted. OCR machines often confuse i for l. The other two were corrected right off, and I will correct this one right now for future readers' benefit. But the other recordings can stand as is, and I don't think the error will detract from the poem, in fact I think fall makes more sense than fail in this instance. Thanks for letting me know.
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Dictionary.com has in its definition of "fail":
verb (used without object): to dwindle, pass, or die away
so, in the poem, the line "The champak odors fail" means "the odors dwindle as does the sharpness of thoughts which come to one in a dream as mentioned in the subsequent line)".
And in the 2nd line in the last verse: "I die, I faint, I fail!" means "Yo! I die, I faint, I dwindle unto death".
So, I kinda think it's not a misspelling nor an OCR slip.
Them's my two-cents.
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Here is my try
https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/indianseranade_shelley_vb_128kb.mp3 1:27
Thank you!
https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/indianseranade_shelley_vb_128kb.mp3 1:27
Thank you!
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Okay, so now I see that fail might make more sense than fall. Champak odors could dwindle, I suppose, as well as fall to ground level where I am fainted under the window. FYI, my OCR comment referred to the Poetry Hunter text that I first quoted, which has long since been removed. So it could well have been an OCR slip but nevermind about that. It's fixed now and thank you tovarisch for your eagle eye.williamjones wrote: ↑September 15th, 2019, 7:31 amDictionary.com has in its definition of "fail":
verb (used without object): to dwindle, pass, or die away
so, in the poem, the line "The champak odors fail" means "the odors dwindle as does the sharpness of thoughts which come to one in a dream as mentioned in the subsequent line)".
And in the 2nd line in the last verse: "I die, I faint, I fail!" means "Yo! I die, I faint, I dwindle unto death".
So, I kinda think it's not a misspelling nor an OCR slip.
Them's my two-cents.
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Thanks Larry and Tovarisch. You "dreamy" fellas never fail to be PL OK!
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The curious thing is that both 'fail' and 'fall' in the second stanza do not follow the established rhyme scheme.
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Shelley (or his typographer) "unwrapped" lines, merging alternate lines into one. The resulting lines turn out to be rhyming Heroic Couplets.
Example from the last octet:
[Original as printed:]
O, lift me from the grass!
I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain
On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas!
My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again,
Where it will break at last!
[unwrapped]
O, lift me from the grass! I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas! My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again, Where it will break at last!
Thus, substituting "fall" for "fail" breaks the internal, hidden rhyme scheme. I can't think of a reason for this "unwrapping" of lines which disguises the fairly simple rhyme scheme.
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But you're missing, perhaps, how clever this is. See grass/alas and rain/againwilliamjones wrote: ↑September 16th, 2019, 7:56 amShelley (or his typographer) "unwrapped" lines, merging alternate lines into one. The resulting lines turn out to be rhyming Heroic Couplets.
Example from the last octet:
[Original and printed:]
O, lift me from the grass!
I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain
On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas!
My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again,
Where it will break at last!
[unwrapped]
O, lift me from the grass! I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas! My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again, Where it will break at last!
I can't think of a reason for this "unwrapping" of lines which disguises the fairly simple rhyme scheme.
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