silverquill wrote: ↑October 21st, 2021, 10:18 am
I should contribute more regularly to these collections. I have a ton of stuff in my SNF list to do.
But, I couldn't pass up the chance to get this one into audio.
The Red Man's Rebuke
Simon Pokagon 1830 - 1899
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Simon_Pokagon
Hi Silverquill, We're always glad to have your readings for the Short Nonfiction Collection!
This will be the first time that Simon Pokagon appears in the LibriVox catalog! He certainly deserves a wider audience for his eloquent defense of Indian rights.
Pokagon's powerful imagining of Tche-ban-yot-booz, the Great Spirt's day of judgement is really marvelous, with the pale faces and red spirits facing off, and the pale faces being challenged to fly.
"...when the great drum beats, let all try their powers to fly. Only those can rise who acted well their part on earth to redeem and save the fallen... The drum will be sounded, and the innumerable multitude will appear like some vast sea of wounded birds struggling to rise..."
There is only one slip you might like to fix, and two places where you need to cut out repeats.
The slip is on page 9, in the paragraph by Peter Martyr. at 13:11.
"They are content with so little, that in so large a country they have rather a superfluity than a scarceness..." You said "than a sacredness."
The repeats are at 11:10 to 11:13 and 11:22 to 11:25.
There's also a long gap between parts of a sentence at 11:41 that you might want to tighten.
Many thanks for your contribution to vol. 087!
I'll fix it asap. 
I guess many people don't know that they breathe like we do in the night. 
