Phil,
Still really enjoying your reading and the story. A couple of things on Chapter X:
6:33.5 Softly the old Miran smiled. You said Martian
8:48 Then—then our atomic bombs can destroy those forts, and we can move on! You left off the first “Then” It is a small thing but I think it adds something, but your call.
Wayne
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Hello again,
I had a few more minutes so I did Part XI.
Curiouser and curiouser!!
A few things in Part XI:
:40 Deenmor is sending, Buck," You added back between sending and Buck
3:45 Then a crew of two dozen Mirans started across the dry, crumbly powder of Mars' sands, toward the fort. I heard power
10:47 Also, the "S Doradus" had brought in several hundred tons of charged mercury on each trip, I hears ship. It does make a little difference to the meaning of the sentence.
11:43 For the mathematics had been perfectly correct, You said But. Again, minor but meaningful I think.
12:09.5 Because the laws of cause and effect didn't hold in what he was doing now. You said on (see above comments.)
12:50.5 Kendall wanted to see what this was doing. You added thing between this and was
Looking forward to the conclusion!
Wayne
I had a few more minutes so I did Part XI.
Curiouser and curiouser!!
A few things in Part XI:
:40 Deenmor is sending, Buck," You added back between sending and Buck
3:45 Then a crew of two dozen Mirans started across the dry, crumbly powder of Mars' sands, toward the fort. I heard power
10:47 Also, the "S Doradus" had brought in several hundred tons of charged mercury on each trip, I hears ship. It does make a little difference to the meaning of the sentence.
11:43 For the mathematics had been perfectly correct, You said But. Again, minor but meaningful I think.
12:09.5 Because the laws of cause and effect didn't hold in what he was doing now. You said on (see above comments.)
12:50.5 Kendall wanted to see what this was doing. You added thing between this and was
Looking forward to the conclusion!
Wayne
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Hey Wayne. I have corrected 10 and 11 and uploaded them again.
All of your catches are spot on, thanks!
All of your catches are spot on, thanks!
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Thanks for the kind words, I try.philchenevert wrote: ↑October 1st, 2021, 7:41 pm Hey Wayne. I have corrected 10 and 11 and uploaded them again.
All of your catches are spot on, thanks!
Chapter/Part 10 is PLOK
However, on 11 I think you missed:
10:47 Also, the "S Doradus" had brought in several hundred tons of charged mercury on each trip, I hear ship. It does make a little difference to the meaning of the sentence.
I still hear ship.
Will probably be Tuesday before I get to the conclusion. Out of town, then back out of town Wed.-Fri. I really think I can get it this coming Tuesday.
Wayne
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Yep, it still said ship. Sad. Fixed now and uploaded.However, on 11 I think you missed:
10:47 Also, the "S Doradus" had brought in several hundred tons of charged mercury on each trip, I hear ship. It does make a little difference to the meaning of the sentence.
I still hear ship.
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Ship to Trip perfect! Chapter 11 is PLOK
Soooo close. I found one small error in 12:
8:57 And only material energy could have stood up before it. I heard for
All in all a very good job and entertaining narration. Just one smmaall fix.
Wayne
Soooo close. I found one small error in 12:
8:57 And only material energy could have stood up before it. I heard for
All in all a very good job and entertaining narration. Just one smmaall fix.
Wayne
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Well that was easy. Thanks for your help with this. Part 12 fixed and uploaded.
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Perfectly done Phil!! The Ultimate Weapon by John Campbell IS PLOKphilchenevert wrote: ↑October 5th, 2021, 5:11 pm Well that was easy. Thanks for your help with this. Part 12 fixed and uploaded.
Whenever you are up for another and are willing to have me, go for it.
I will be gone like for the next week, except maybe for Saturday, so if you don't hear from me, I have not fallen off of the face of the earth.
Thanks,
Wayne
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Thanks a bunch Wayne and PLEASE don't fall off the earth. I've heard it is flat and you can just step over the edges so be careful.Kalamareader wrote: ↑October 5th, 2021, 6:50 pmPerfectly done Phil!! The Ultimate Weapon by John Campbell IS PLOKphilchenevert wrote: ↑October 5th, 2021, 5:11 pm Well that was easy. Thanks for your help with this. Part 12 fixed and uploaded.
Whenever you are up for another and are willing to have me, go for it.
I will be gone like for the next week, except maybe for Saturday, so if you don't hear from me, I have not fallen off of the face of the earth.
Thanks,
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Many thanks Wayne
Many thanks Wayne