COMPLETE[PLAY]Civil Service by Hare - thw

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Thank you.

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ToddHW wrote: June 1st, 2021, 1:10 pm
Shawn510 wrote: February 20th, 2021, 9:45 pm Here is my act 1:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_postmaster_1_128kb.mp3

07:16 length

Thanks!
Missing line, not picked up in PL:

On page 10: Reynolds (outside R). "Steve, Steve, where in thunder is that circular of instructions? Peavy, come here. I want you."

Separate file please - I have your original file in the master for the act already.

Thanks, Todd
Here is the separate file. I hope I have the everything close enough to the original.


https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_postmaster_separate_128kb.mp3

Thanks!
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Thank you. PL OK, and cut into Act 1 which I will now finish off.

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GregGiordano wrote: June 2nd, 2021, 8:39 pm Acts 2 & 3 for The Inspector with all noted corrections:

Act 2 -

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_theinspector_2_128kb.mp3

Act 3 -

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_theinspector_3_128kb.mp3

Take care,

Greg
Great, Greg! All PL OK now. :clap: Thanks for humoring me with these teensy tiny corrections. :D
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benderca wrote: June 7th, 2021, 1:53 pm
GregGiordano wrote: June 2nd, 2021, 8:39 pm Acts 2 & 3 for The Inspector with all noted corrections:

Act 2 -

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_theinspector_2_128kb.mp3

Act 3 -

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_theinspector_3_128kb.mp3

Take care,

Greg
Great, Greg! All PL OK now. :clap: Thanks for humoring me with these teensy tiny corrections. :D
We all just want to do the best we can! I admire your attention to detail. I look forward to working with you again!

Greg
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Draft of Act 2 done (not ready for PL yet); heading for Act 3.

Gotta find out what happens since Act 2 ended with my character confessing and being arrested for theft!

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And Draft of Act 3 also completed.

Now, need to groom the files and adjust gaps and volumes as I finally get to listen to everything before releasing it to Final PL!

Thanks, Todd
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Todd,

I am amazed whenever I work on one of your projects how you can take these disparate pieces and build a comprehensive and comprehensible play. Thank you for your hard work, which, in my opinion. Is not always given the recognition it deserves.

It is an honor and a pleasure to work with you.

Take care,

Greg
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Thank you.

I came to this hobby as a choral singer - when I lost my voice to tinnitus I still wanted to perform in a collaborative group environment. Here as an editor I have all these wonderfully voiced parts from other contributors to meld together into a whole work - great fun. And deeply satisfying.

Thanks, Todd
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ToddHW wrote: June 8th, 2021, 12:53 pm Thank you.

I came to this hobby as a choral singer - when I lost my voice to tinnitus I still wanted to perform in a collaborative group environment. Here as an editor I have all these wonderfully voiced parts from other contributors to meld together into a whole work - great fun. And deeply satisfying.

Thanks, Todd
Wow! Thank you for sharing your journey to the Librivox family. What a cool way to stay involved with this fascinating world we all love so much!
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Act 1 is ready for Final PL.

What great acting! Ye'all sound great.

Thanks, Todd
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ToddHW wrote: June 10th, 2021, 11:47 am Act 1 is ready for Final PL.

What great acting! Ye'all sound great.

Thanks, Todd
Oh, that's exciting! I'm afraid I won't be able to get to it until Sunday. Can't wait!
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And Act 2 is also ready for final PL.

Oh no! What has my character just done??!!??

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Act 3 is ready for final PL too.

Happy ending. What a surprise!

Wonderful voices. Great performance.

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ToddHW wrote: June 10th, 2021, 11:47 am Act 1 is ready for Final PL.

What great acting! Ye'all sound great.

Thanks, Todd
Civil Service Act 1 Notes:

This is fantastic – all the characters are so interesting and distinct from one another. Very nicely done, everyone! And nice editing, Todd.

I have a few notes, but they are all “take-it-or-leave-it-it-would-be-good-either-way” types of notes. Everything flows nicely and nothing is missing.


I would suggest that the space between the two lines (8:38-8:40) be reduced, as presumably, Peavy’s sentence is either cut off by Steve’s arrival or Octavia’s next line.

Peavy. Why, I didn't say anything. I only said —

Enter Steve Audaine from R.


11:56 – 11:58,
I think you could cut out the stage direction: “Octavia (sighs)” – because Octavia clearly sighs right after that.


19:33-19:34
You might want to cut the space between Steve’s line and Peavy’s line at 19:33-19:34, so that it sounds more like Steve is cutting Peavy off:

Peavy. Well, a little bird has been a-telling me —

Steve. Honest, Sim Peavy,


29:49-51
I don’t think there needs to be a space here (or maybe just one second – it seems Reynolds, has to think too long to answer a simple question:

Peavy. No, sir; are we going to have a new sub?

Reynolds. Yes…


41:39
I think it would be more effective if you took out the stage direction “Miss G. (interrupting)” and instead just run the two lines together (so it sounds like she is interrupting).

Steve. I’ll remember and I want to thank you. I—

Miss G. (interrupting). Don't waste your time…


50:29-50:31
I would suggest closing the gap here, so that it is clear that Reynold’s is stopping Goldie from repeating his words:

Goldie. Well, you said to tell that old—

Reynolds. That will do…


51:13
It might flow better if stage direction were removed:
“Mrs. J. (indignantly).” – I think indignity is reflected in my tone.


1:05:07-09
If you cut out the space between these two lines, it will sound like Peavy is cutting off Goldie (and preventing him from telling an embarrassing story).

Goldie. I want to know how to wear store shoes without making my feet feel like old Tom Gin. You see, I got two corns—

Peavy. That'll do, my golden sunset. The postmaster wants you.


1:06:12-15
I suggest you cut out the stage direction here: “Kate (L. C)” and pull the two lines together. The SD is not important and it hinders Kate from interrupting Steve.

STEVE: …Honest, I—

[Kate (L. C).] Now, now;


1:08:22-23
I suggest tightening up the space between the two lines, so that Kate can interrupt Steve (it kind of sounds like he’s hanging there for a moment).

Steve. … It won't mean a big house or servants, or a car, but—

Kate. Maybe she won't want a big house…



One additional little note. There is a background noise in the stage directions (loudest in the middle of the act) that I find a bit distracting. Maybe you could run a noise reduction over the whole act, using something from around 30:45-56 or 31:05-31:11.

Great job, everyone!
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