[COMPLETE] Constructive Conscious Control of the Individual by F. Matthias Alexander-mas
David Puthuff
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- 29:53
- What I heard: “development on the so-called physical and on the so-called…”
- What is written: “development on the so-called physical than on the so-called…”
- I feel this changes the intent.
- 42:29
- What I heard: “Indeed, from its beginning, the process…”
- What is written: “Indeed, from its beginnings, the process…”
- I do not feel this changes the intent
Fabulous work.
David Puthuff
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Sorry for the delay. I hope you are not waiting on me to continue on.
- 3:12
- What I heard: “…is not conductive to the employment…”
- What is written: “…is not conducive to the employment…”
- I believe this changes the intent.
- 8:55
- What I heard: “…considered that the “right” remedy has not been found,”
- What is written: “…considered that the “right” remedy had not been found,”
- Present tense vs. past tense. Your call
- 14:45
- What I heard: “…throw light on many of our problems at the present time.”
- What is written: “…throw light on many of our own problems at the present time.”
- Possible dropped word
- 19:22
- What I heard: “…turn to his own use the different forces…”
- What is written: “…turn to his own uses the different forces…”
- Singular vs. Plural
- 33:55
- What I heard: “…pass on to the Christian Era, to see in what…”
- What is written: “…pass on to the Christian Era, and see in what…”
- Most likely not an issue
- 36:18
- What I heard: “…human organism into parts which have been named…”
- What is written: “…human organism into the parts which have been named…”
- I am undecided if this changes anything.
- 36:31
- What I heard: “…to develop each of these parts named soul,…”
- What is written: “…to develop each of the three parts named soul,…”
- He is specifically writing about these 3 parts.
David Puthuff
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Thanks, no worries! I've made changes to address the issues at 3:12, 8:55, 14:45 and 36:31, and section 7 is ready for PL.
I always have a tab open to look up pronunciations when I record. The worst is when I decide to look up a word just in case and discover that I've been pronouncing it wrong. At least this book doesn't contain much gazetteer material.You do a phenomenal job of pronouncing some of these words. Do you just know how to say them, or do you end up researching them sometimes?
Michael
- 4:55
- What I heard, “in other words, the accuracy or otherwise…”
- What is written, “in other words, that the accuracy or otherwise…”
- Does not change intent much
- 14:01
- The second footnote on page 110. The one that looks like a cross or ‘t’. I do not believe you actually read the footnote. You read through page 111 and never go back to that footnote.
- 16:12
- What I heard, “…, the fatal defect of all such instances…”
- What is written, “…, the fatal defect in all such instances…”
- Possible intent change
- 16:50
- What I heard: You did not preface the fact that you are reading a footnote. (Is there a more polite way to say this?) Nor did you state “End of footnote.”
- After reading the footnote, the audio begins in the middle of the next sentence. “…nor its ingenuity at a given…”
- These are most likely just editing issues?
- 20:21
- What I heard, “…several others, even more harmful, will…”
- What is written, “…several others, often more harmful, will…”
- Possible intent change
- 25:00
- What I heard, The pronunciation of the word “adolescence,” with the emphasis on the second syllable. ‘dol’
- Without having the written word in front of me, I would not have been able to figure out what word is being read.
- My English ear is expecting the emphasis on the third syllable, “les”.
- The only reason I bring this up is to avoid confusion for the listener.
- 27:19
- What I heard, “…efforts as a pupil and in all other spheres…”
- What is written, “…efforts as a pupil in all other spheres…”
- Added a word. Possible intent change
David Puthuff
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- 1:54 Footnote
- What I heard, “In this case it can be …”
- What is written, “In this sense it can be …”
- Intent?
- 12:00 Footnote
- Was this footnote skipped intentionally?
- 16:45
- What I heard, “…possibly be extricated, unless he stops…”
- What is written, “…possibly be extricated, until he stops…”
- Intent?
- 34:37
- What I heard, The pronunciation of the word “adolescence,” with the emphasis on the second syllable. ‘dol’
- Without having the written word in front of me, I would not have been able to figure out what word is being read.
- My English ear is expecting the emphasis on the third syllable, “les”.
- The only reason I bring this up is to avoid confusion for the listener.
David Puthuff
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Thank you, David! Please let me know if any other words with misplaced stress jump out at you.
Section 8:
4:55 left as is
14:20 inserted footnote on p. 110
16:12+40" “…, the fatal defect in all such instances…”
20:21+40" “…several others, often more harmful, will…”
25:00+40" fixed "adolescence"
27:19+40" deleted "and"
Section 9:
1:54 “In this sense it can be …”
12:00 Was this footnote skipped intentionally? - Yes
16:45 left as is
34:37 fixed "adolescence"
Michael
Section 8:
4:55 left as is
14:20 inserted footnote on p. 110
16:12+40" “…, the fatal defect in all such instances…”
20:21+40" “…several others, often more harmful, will…”
25:00+40" fixed "adolescence"
27:19+40" deleted "and"
Section 9:
1:54 “In this sense it can be …”
12:00 Was this footnote skipped intentionally? - Yes
16:45 left as is
34:37 fixed "adolescence"
Michael
I'm sorry. You missed one of my comments on Section 8
- 17:30 (Updated Time-code)
- Pg.112
- What I heard: You did not preface the fact that you are reading a footnote. (Is there a more polite way to say this?) Nor did you state “End of footnote.”
- After reading the footnote, the audio begins in the middle of the next sentence. “…nor its ingenuity at a given…” skipping more than a line of text.
- These are most likely just editing issues?
David Puthuff
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Ah, yes, I skipped over this item while making edits. Thanks for catching that! I had deliberately read this footnote as a parenthetical for fluency, and now I've added the missing sentence fragment.
Section 11 is ready for PL. I won't be starting the next one for a few days.
Michael
Section 11 is ready for PL. I won't be starting the next one for a few days.
Michael