COMPLETE[PLAY]The Squire by Arthur Wing Pinero - thw

[Kitty]

Fell, act 3 for PL: https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_fell_3_128kb.mp3

thank you Nemo, Fell here sounds quite affronted well done.

However, if I may suggest a bit of a change in emphasis, I think the sentence would be more comprehensible. For me it sounds a bit like he meant the single word "shop-stores", the way you say it. What Fell is so enraged about though is the fact that they called his business a "shop", and he wants to emphasize that it's "stores". So he would make more of a break between the two words: "Not a shop ! - Stores !!"

I let you decide, let me know whether you want to redo, otherwise one can also accept it like that.

Sonia

[NemoR]

thank you Nemo, Fell here sounds quite affronted well done.

However, if I may suggest a bit of a change in emphasis, I think the sentence would be more comprehensible. For me it sounds a bit like he meant the single word "shop-stores", the way you say it. What Fell is so enraged about though is the fact that they called his business a "shop", and he wants to emphasize that it's "stores". So he would make more of a break between the two words: "Not a shop ! - Stores !!"

I let you decide, let me know whether you want to redo, otherwise one can also accept it like that.

Sonia

see if you like this better ... https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_fell_3_128kb.mp3

[ToddHW]

Thank you, Nemo. And a big THANK YOU to Kitty/Sonia for all the continuing great PL work here and elsewhere!

Todd

[Kitty]

see if you like this better ... https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_fell_3_128kb.mp3

yes exactly, that's what I meant thank you, PL ok now

Sonia

[silverquill]

Taking a break from the Torchbearers to edit these acts. Seemed like a walk in the park by comparison. Hope these came out okay. I bit of pathos with Kate.

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_1_128kb.mp3 8:01
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_2_128kb.mp3 4:00
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_3_128kb.mp3 3:55

[Kitty]

Hope these came out okay. I bit of pathos with Kate.

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_1_128kb.mp3 8:01
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_2_128kb.mp3 4:00
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_3_128kb.mp3 3:55

great job, Larry, thank you. Yes you managed quite some pathos (which you need to match my dramatics ) But Thorndyke still sounds more boyish immature than Kate, which is probably quite accurate, as he doesn't strike me the totally reliable type, regardless of his assurances.

I have a few notes to correct, but for most it was an excellent performance

for Act 1:

> at 0:58: "Kate's love to Eric. Oh! by Jove, I forgot!" - I would have an optional suggestion for improving this part: I would say this more softly, and then more startled/afraid. It's their secret after all, so he would be on his guards. He somehow sounds to chipper for me her, but it wouldn't be a joke if the parson had seen this inscription

> at 7:16: "you've made me make a blot" - you forgot "make", which doesn't make sense here

for Act 2:

> at about 3:52: missed line: "Then, sir, in the sight of heaven, yes."

for Act 3:

> at about 1:59: missed line: "When I get away from India, on leave, I shan't know where to bend my steps unless it's to the country that holds my girl."

thanks. When we get those corrections, acts 1 and 2 will be ready for editing

Sonia

[silverquill]

I think your suggestion on the line in Act I is a good one. I hope I captured the mood a bit better.
Here are the corrected files:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_1_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_2_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_3_128kb.mp3

[ToddHW]

Thank you.

Todd

[Kitty]

I think your suggestion on the line in Act I is a good one. I hope I captured the mood a bit better.

indeed, I think it's much more appropriate the way you said it this time.

Acts 1 and 3 are now PL ok.

For Act 2, I still think that the line is a bit off:

> at 3:52: "Then, sir, in the sight of heaven, yes." - you say "light", which I think is not the meaning here

thank you.

Act 1 can now be assembled, apart from the two missing voice credits from Act 3.

Sonia

[silverquill]

For Act 2, I still think that the line is a bit off:

> at 3:52: "Then, sir, in the sight of heaven, yes." - you say "light", which I think is not the meaning here

sigh - one line and I misread it.
Let's try again. https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_2_128kb.mp3

[Kitty]

sigh - one line and I misread it.
Let's try again. https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/squire_eric_2_128kb.mp3

got it now thank you, Larry, PL ok now.

Todd: Act 2 is ready to edit

Sonia

[ToddHW]

Okay. I'm on it....

Thanks, Todd

[ToddHW]

Act 1 DRAFT is just shy of too big to fit. Pinero does like to give all those stage directions to tell his actors how to act....

Thanks, Todd

[ToddHW]

Draft of Act 2 also done. Must groom both of these before final PL.

Wonderful voices, all of you. But in Act 2 I particularly like Felicity singing so well - and then haltingly reading written words - really creates her character so well.

Thanks, Todd

[atole]

Might I say - the narration in this is wizard keen wicked sick! Propz 2 Maggz!