I made all the changes you suggest. Except for 1:14 - that line is already said at 0:58 (yeah, it is printed twice in the script).mightyfelix wrote: ↑June 17th, 2020, 4:11 pmWow, first, I'll say that this was one fantastic play! And everyone played their roles to perfection! What a treat that was!
Now, I do have a few more notes than I usually give you, Todd, especially for something this short. But since I wasn't involved in the production of this play up to now (and I don't want to search through the thread), I don't know what PL notes the readers may or may not have been given, or, if there were notes, what you may have already decided to let slide. So I made notes of anything I heard in that vein as well, and you can ignore them if you want.
0:36 "Ed, his son, read by Larry Wilson." Underlined portion missing.
0:45 "Phoebe Ward, a witch, read by Jennifer Pratt." Underlined portion missing.
1:07 "...at a time when the people of Northampton County still belived..." I hear "Northampton Country"
1:14 Missing: "Scene. The storehouse of a cross-roads store."
11:21 This one may be my ears hearing funny, but the word "boldness" here sounds like it's been cut off. ("bold-ss") I'm not sure if it was like that in the original, or if it might have been a rogue snip.
13:21 (Not a note, but a comment. The mumbling here with Jake talking over Phoebe is phenomenal! Well done! )
19:14 I see that you tried to clip the "he" from "Uncle Benny. He rises." But the snip is pretty noticeable and a bit disturbing. I think you would be better to leave the whole phrase as is. (It even fits with the Carolina brand of grammar, come to think of it.)
Snips never work quite as well as having the line actually said correctly, do they? Glad you liked the mumbling under Jake's voice. I enjoyed this play quite a bit and it was fun to play with the audio.
Ready for Spot PL.