COMPLETE [Fortnightly Poem] The Indian Serenade, by Percy Bysshe Shelley - dl

[msfry]

The curious thing is that both 'fail' and 'fall' in the second stanza do not follow the established rhyme scheme.

Shelley (or his typographer) "unwrapped" lines, merging alternate lines into one. The resulting lines turn out to be rhyming Heroic Couplets.

Example from the last octet:

[Original and printed:]

O, lift me from the grass!
I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain
On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas!
My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again,
Where it will break at last!

[unwrapped]

O, lift me from the grass! I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas! My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again, Where it will break at last!

I can't think of a reason for this "unwrapping" of lines which disguises the fairly simple rhyme scheme.

But you're missing, perhaps, how clever this is. See grass/alas and rain/again

Well slap my back, I finally get it, unwrapped, and it is clever! I think it depends on what time of day, and how many cups of coffee.

[KevinS]

Shelley (or his typographer) "unwrapped" lines, merging alternate lines into one. The resulting lines turn out to be rhyming Heroic Couplets.

Example from the last octet:

[Original and printed:]

O, lift me from the grass!
I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain
On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas!
My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again,
Where it will break at last!

[unwrapped]

O, lift me from the grass! I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas! My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again, Where it will break at last!

I can't think of a reason for this "unwrapping" of lines which disguises the fairly simple rhyme scheme.

But you're missing, perhaps, how clever this is. See grass/alas and rain/again

Well slap my back, I finally get it, and it is clever! I think it depends on what time of day, and how many cups of coffee.

I'm going to have to go straight to caffeine pills. (Wink.)

[msfry]

Shelley (or his typographer) "unwrapped" lines, merging alternate lines into one. The resulting lines turn out to be rhyming Heroic Couplets.

Example from the last octet:

[Original and printed:]

O, lift me from the grass!
I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain
On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas!
My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again,
Where it will break at last!

[unwrapped]

O, lift me from the grass! I die, I faint, I fail!
Let thy love in kisses rain On my lips and eyelids pale,
My cheek is cold and white, alas! My Heart beats loud and fast
Oh! press it close to thine again, Where it will break at last!

I can't think of a reason for this "unwrapping" of lines which disguises the fairly simple rhyme scheme.

But you're missing, perhaps, how clever this is. See grass/alas and rain/again

Well slap my back, I finally get it, unwrapped, and it is clever! I think it depends on what time of day, and how many cups of coffee. Thanks for calling it to my attention

[fshort]

https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/indianserenade_shelley_fs_128kb.mp3
Duration:01:22

[msfry]

Thanks, Florence. You are O! O! OK!

[GrayHouse]

Hi Michele,
Thank you for hosting another lovely project.
I hope my version doesn't fail!

- https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/indianseranade_shelley_ik_128kb.mp3
- 1:44

Thanks,
-Ian

[msfry]

Thanks, Ian. You pass! In fact, here's an Ahhh-OK.

[WiltedScribe]

My entry for this week!

https://librivox.org/uploads/aradlaw/indianserenade_shelley_tp_128kb.mp3 (1:33)

[msfry]

Thank you Tomas. You're a-OK!

[msfry]

Do you guys ever check on Internet Archive to see how many views these poetry weekly and fortnightlies are racking up?????? Some have over 50,000 downloads, and some rack up amazing numbers in just a few weeks. Not all, but a surprising number.

Best way I know to show you is to send you to my covers page (not all are poetry) but you'll recognize the poetry ones there.
https://archive.org/details/fav-msfry

We are doing GOOOOOOOOOOOD!

[aradlaw]

Cataloging for this project will be postponed due to a conflict in the spelling of the word SERENADE.

[msfry]

Cataloging for this project will be postponed due to a conflict in the spelling of the word SERENADE.

What do you suggest I do? I have changed the spelling in the first post, except for the filename. It seems to me, so long as all the file names are the same, they don't need changing. Or can you change them from your end?

I can no longer get into the MW. Clicking the BC Admin link takes me to an unfamiliar page called LibriVox Management Dashboard, Search Existing Projects.

[williamjones]

Cataloging for this project will be postponed due to a conflict in the spelling of the word SERENADE.

I fancy myself as a kind of wordsmith so when I saw this note my curiosity was piqued. I've never come across an alternative spelling of Serenade except in German. I checked (with google) all the permutations and combinations of the a" and "e" vowels and found no other spellilng except SERENADE. However, I recalled that in German music, some dance movements are named SERENAD -- the trailing "e" being dropped. Again I went to Google and found that there are at least 3 languages other than English which drop that final "e" including Turkish, Hungarian and Finnish.

Is there really an objection to English words with alternative spellings (and possibly meanings) in foreign languages?

Just curious....

[bluechien]

I can no longer get into the MW. Clicking the BC Admin link takes me to an unfamiliar page called LibriVox Management Dashboard, Search Existing Projects.

This may not be the case on your end, but lately I've noticed I can't login as BC or PL when using my VPN. I get this page you mention also. Although, logging in as "librivox" to upload a file works just fine. This seems to be something that perhaps Archive.org has lately adopted. Just mentioning in case someone else has this issue that perplexed me quite a bit!

[msfry]

I've never come across an alternative spelling of Serenade except in German.

I made a mistake typing in the title, that's all. I wrote SERANADE. Everyone's file name has the A. Nobody is suggesting that there are two acceptable spellings of serenade. I thank David for noticing and apologize for the trouble.