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Hey Campbell,

I'm so happy you got it right. I'm sure you'll get even better at deductions. Thank you for your kind words! I've enjoyed recording it.

Don't be. I appreciate all your PL notes (you can be as picky as you want with all of my recordings). I've found some time to correct them. To be honest, I've felt a bit weird. So, let me know if I still need to improve any of them. I'll work on the next chapter (17) next week.

@29:48 - said Fibsy, one day, reminiscently.

@29:30 - after two of the one-time friendly quartet

@28:21 - He had to get Mr. Embury out of the way just then, or be shown up—a ruined man.

@26:08 - An instant commotion arose.

@22:43 - Fibsy flung the question at him

@21:02 - she grabbed at you

@20:39 - passing through Miss Ames’ room

@18:21 - administering extreme unction

@17:19 - a miscalculation of distance

@17:07 - when half a dozen stories from the ground

@12:10 - said no word that might not have been heard by the whole world

@10:08 - Sanford holds mortgages on all Hendricks’ belongings

@9:46 - Yes; Hendricks was one who owed him enormous sums

@9:07 - who were in great exigency

@5:04 - How dare you speak to me of my marriage with anybody

@2:05 - After such an interval as you judge proper?

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Nice work, you did fantastic! The only note I didn’t hear changed was at @9:07 - who were in great exigency. I still heard ex-i-GEN-cy instead of ‘EX-i-gen-cy’. Otherwise, it was great work!
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lymiewithpurpose wrote: March 27th, 2021, 4:41 pm Nice work, you did fantastic! The only note I didn’t hear changed was at @9:07 - who were in great exigency. I still heard ex-i-GEN-cy instead of ‘EX-i-gen-cy’. Otherwise, it was great work!
Thanks! :9:

I see. Well, I tried to pronounce it right but I guess I didn't succeed. I'll practice saying it and then correct it with chapter 17.

See you on Saturday. :thumbs:
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Chapter 14 PL Notes
@15:07 - if he’d croaked the guy his own self!
lymiewithpurpose wrote: April 20th, 2020, 7:22 am
SaraHale wrote: April 19th, 2020, 6:39 am
lymiewithpurpose wrote: April 18th, 2020, 1:48 pm Wow, that was very impressive. Your editing always amazes me. I still have a few tiny notes (pretty good for the amount I gave you originally):

15:04 - Croaked – I’m still hearing an ‘oo’ sound instead of the ‘oa’ sound

15:19 – that noticeable editing – I actually didn’t find it that bad. If I were you, I may just de amplify that segment a tad as it just seemed a bit loud

24:58 – congenital – this time was better, I know it’s a hard word, but I heard ‘conigenital’ instead of ‘congenital’

I can't wait for Chapter 15 (and the clues), although it may be in a few days. I somehow got behind on editing work.
Thanks, Campbell!

I did my best to fix them but feel free to let me know if they need more correction. :mrgreen:

@15:07 - if he’d croaked the guy his own self!
@15:19 - de amplify it by -3
@24:58 - a congenital prevaricator, I meant to say.

I'll go and edit Chapter 16 so it would be ready when you have free time. :thumbs:
Well congenital was perfect, and the de amplification made the edit unnoticeable to my ears. The only thing I'm still having a bit of a problem with is the 'croaked'. Not sure if you've googled pronunciation, but the way to pronounce croak can be found here: https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/pronunciation/english/croak. Hope that helps.

I only have about 20 minutes of recording run time to edit (so probably a few hours of actual work :lol:) but can then get to chapter 15!
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Chapter 15 PL Notes

@23:32 - They’re bigger’n a house!

@21:30 - he seemed a trifle in awe of his surroundings

@14:34 - smiling at the recollection

@13:54 - hadn’t stopped a mite short of his collar

@12:27 - I did it under compulsory hypnotism

@11:50 - and seemed to have become entirely reconciled

@04:49 - though anxious for results
lymiewithpurpose wrote: April 21st, 2020, 10:53 am Wow, Chapter 15 gave some great clues, that I think helped me solve it. This may be totally obvious, but I suspect Hendricks as the main one, using Hanlon as help. Don't know exactly how, but Hendricks obviously really cares about Eunice. The medium is suspicious. With it's disguise, I think it was Hanlon playing that part with information from Hendricks about the name and stuff. Hendricks wanted the blame on Aunt Abbey. I also think Hendrick's ear problems have something to do with it, not sure what. I was also curious, maybe the gasoline actually killed Embury? Maybe not. This could all be totally off. Just thinking. We'll see.

Only a few notes:
4:50 – results should be pronounced ‘re-SULTS’ rather than ‘RE-sults’

11:52 – small note, but reconciled should be pronounced with a soft e

12:28 – heard ‘compulsively’ instead of ‘compulsory’

13:56 – heard ‘mint’ instead of ‘mite’

14:35 – recollection should also have a soft e

21:31 – I heard more of ‘owe’ than ‘awe’

20:32 – didn’t hear the ‘a’ in bigger’n a house, which makes it sound strange to me
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Chapter 16 PL Notes

@27:41 - And as it is a blot on his memory

@27:31 - may have had collateral security from them

@24:26 - Bringin’ us back

@22:26 - and let these shady matters alone.

@19:15 - was the tart response

@17:14 - fussed with its silver appointments.

@16:44 - or a photographer

@16:12 - he banked on his nerve

@16:01 - of wheedling

@10:05 - Where’s Mis’ Embury

@09:28 - of his breakfast

@07:17 - and scoots off

@04:08 - Well, he hadn’t more’n tripped over the Embury ‘Welcome’ mat

@03:17 - that Miss Ames went to see yesterday afternoon
lymiewithpurpose wrote: April 22nd, 2020, 1:03 pm Oh, Chapter 16 brought up some new stuff. I think it's kinda unfair that Mr. Patterson was introduced so late but it does add a layer to it. So now I'm thinking Hendricks and Patterson worked together and enlisted Hanlon. Can't wait to find out. Unfortunately I have a bunch of notes this time. Some of them are pretty nit picky so as always feel free to skip some.

3:17 – heard ‘Mrs. Ames’ instead of ‘Miss Ames’

4:10 – heard ‘more trippened’ instead of ‘more’n tripped’

7:18 – heard ‘Scotts’ instead of ‘scoots’

9:25 – breakfast is just the slightest bit off- the ‘break’ should not be pronounced as in ‘break’ but should sound more like ‘brek’ if that makes sense

10:06 – not sure if this is intentional, but Embury here sounds different than the other times you say it

11:01 – heard ‘worst’ instead of ‘worsted’

16:01 – heard ‘wielding’ instead of ‘wheedling’

16:12 – heard ‘backed’ instead of ‘banked’

16:40 – ‘photographer’ has a unique pronunciation, I won’t point you to a link as I don’t know which ones you will be able to hear

17:15 – heard ‘fused’ instead of ‘fussed’

19:17 – heard ‘respond’ instead of ‘response’

22:28 – shady should have a hard a in it

24:26 – very picky here, but I’m having a hard time hearing the second ‘in’ sound so it sounds more like ‘bring’ to me, there may be nothing you can do though

27:33 – collateral sounded funky to me, it sounded better earlier

27:42 – heard ‘bolt’ instead of ‘blot
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Chapter 17 PL Notes

@ 25:04 - this becoming expert

@ 24:31 - and cut up pranks on the edges of roofs of skyscrapers

@ 23:42 - was the hearty reply

@ 22:15 - in whacking up

@ 15:52 - but I gotta go up to his room a minute.

@ 13:46 - How is the silence?

@8:35 - And Mr. Patterson had borrowed money of Mr. Embury—

@5:04 - I know you have something in your noddle

@1:24 - which was now in a Westchester suburb.

@1:06 - and under the tuition of Fleming Stone

@00:37 - and letting them infer

@00:24 - he skilfully utilized
lymiewithpurpose wrote: April 22nd, 2020, 3:44 pm Chapter 16 is interesting. Didn't change too much for me, but with Hanlon being a climber maybe he climbed up through Patterson's window? I can't wait for the next chapter.

Sadly have quite a bit of notes here too.
0:25 – heard ‘scarefully’ instead of ‘skilfully’

0:38 – heard ‘in fear’ instead of ‘infer’

1:07 – heard ‘intuition’ instead of ‘tuition’

1:25 – missed ‘a’ in ‘a Westchester suburb’ (which can change the meaning)

5:41 – heard ‘noodle’ instead of ‘noddle’

8:37 – borrowed sounds a bit like board here to me

13:46 – there is some loud traffic noise, maybe just replace this silence with silence (if that makes sense)

15:53 – missed ‘go’ in ‘gotta go up’

22:10 – heard ‘racking up’ instead of ‘whacking up’

23:42 – heard ‘hardly’ instead of ‘hearty’

24:35 – heard ‘skyscrapes’ instead of ‘skyscrapers’

25:06 – heard ‘experiment’ instead of ‘expert’
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Chapter 18 PL Notes

@09:06 - who were in great exigency
lymiewithpurpose wrote: March 27th, 2021, 4:41 pm Nice work, you did fantastic! The only note I didn’t hear changed was at @9:07 - who were in great exigency. I still heard ex-i-GEN-cy instead of ‘EX-i-gen-cy’. Otherwise, it was great work!
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Wow, you did a lot! I’ll work on getting to these over the next few days!
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lymiewithpurpose wrote: March 31st, 2021, 8:26 am Wow, you did a lot! I’ll work on getting to these over the next few days!
Take your time! I just had free time plus the street was quiet. So, I couldn't miss out on the chance. Feel free to picky with the spot PL.

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Chapter 18 is PL OK! I have a few tiny notes for the others, but there's much less than before, so nice work. I know I've said this a lot, but I'm always impressed with your editing. I'll post each chapter's notes in a new post. We're almost there!
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Chapter 14:

15:03-15:07 – for some reason, even though this phrase is just before the one that you corrected, I’m hearing some background fuzz in it. The ‘croaked’ sounds great though!
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Chapter 15:

11:50 – ‘reconciled’ still heard ‘ree-con-ciled’ instead of ‘reh-con-ciled’.

23: 32 – heard the ‘a’ now, but missed the ‘n’ in ‘bigger’n (I know this is kind of strange, but it sounds stragne to me if not all the letters are there)
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Chapter 16:

27:31 – heard ‘corrateral’ instead of ‘collateral’ here
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Chapter 17:

23:39 – for some reason (even though you didn’t edit here) I’m hearing some static. Sorry for not catching this the first time, it’s not like me.

23:42 – ‘was the hearty reply’ sounds a bit louder here, maybe you could deamplify it a tad?
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