COMPLETE[PLAY]The "Mind The Paint" Girl by Pinero - thw

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ToddHW wrote: October 26th, 2019, 6:18 pm Act 2 is ready for final PL. You all sound so great!
what an absolute riot at that party !!!! It must have been a lot of visuals to the audience to have so many people on stage and each talking in their small groups or in dialogues in different corners. Even here there are so many voices, but we all sound so distinct and they are all very different characters. I especially loved the great finale with Lilly laughing happily while the curtain falls. :9: Very funny was also the drunkard Fulkerson showing up all through the act :lol:

And the merging of voices was expertly done, it's great that you put them one after the other the way you did, but still blending into each other, Todd. :thumbs:

I have only a few small notes:

> at 13:52: missing stage direction: Ha, Dolly! Kissing her. How are you, my dear? - I'm not sure if Brad inserted a kissing sound here that you maybe wanted to use and then forgot :hmm:

> from-26:40-27:05: "Many happy returns of the day!" I must admit, this assemblage felt quite a bit too long for my taste, the first half was ok but then it started to be a bit overkill. There were not nearly enough people on stage to warrant such a long greeting. I think with only half the length you would already amply convey a huge party with lots of guests congratulating Lilly.

> at 44:27: Bland to Nita "Nita" - I think here we can cut the stage direction, since Bland says the name, we all know who he is talking to

the rest perfect as always, and highly entertaining ! Bravo all !

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I hardly ever complain about your great suggestions, but I do disagree here.
Kitty wrote: October 28th, 2019, 6:37 am > at 13:52: missing stage direction: Ha, Dolly! Kissing her. How are you, my dear? - I'm not sure if Brad inserted a kissing sound here that you maybe wanted to use and then forgot :hmm:
Missing stage direction - not in the stage direction file. Seemed okay without it to me. The noise of kissing without a stage direction might not be easily understood - I don't remember cutting anything from Brad but I would have anyway without a direction first. (In another place that follows there is a stage direction about kissing Dolly's hand.)
> from-26:40-27:05: "Many happy returns of the day!" I must admit, this assemblage felt quite a bit too long for my taste, the first half was ok but then it started to be a bit overkill. There were not nearly enough people on stage to warrant such a long greeting. I think with only half the length you would already amply convey a huge party with lots of guests congratulating Lilly.
I'll play with this some more. Ideally I'd like to get the cries to fade behind Jimmy's words, but it is proving very hard to do that and keep the multiple Audacity tracks synchronized.... Stay tuned.
> at 44:27: Bland to Nita "Nita" - I think here we can cut the stage direction, since Bland says the name, we all know who he is talking to
There are many groups separately talking on stage at this point - identified in similar stage directions: Roper to Mrs Stidulph, Daphne to Hennige, De Castro to Gabrielle. The "Bland to Nita" stage direction is important not because it is Bland or Nita, but because it identifies that Bland and Nita are in another of the separate groups swirling around on stage at the time.

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ToddHW wrote: October 28th, 2019, 7:03 am Missing stage direction - not in the stage direction file. Seemed okay without it to me.
oops, my bad then, sorry :oops: and yes of course, it's not crucial. We can easily leave it out.
There are many groups separately talking on stage at this point - identified in similar stage directions: Roper to Mrs Stidulph, Daphne to Hennige, De Castro to Gabrielle. The "Bland to Nita" stage direction is important not because it is Bland or Nita, but because it identifies that Bland and Nita are in another of the separate groups swirling around on stage at the time.
ok fair enough, it might be more explanatory, sure, no harm done to keep them in :)

In any case, these were trivial notes, the act is grandiose as it is. :9:

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Okay, I think I got the party scene and "Many Happy Returns" fixed nicely - you might listen for the next minute after that to see if I realigned everything afterwards better.

Thank you so much Sonia! I really appreciate your comments on this.

Two more acts to go; I think they will be easier.....

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ToddHW wrote: October 28th, 2019, 2:24 pmOkay, I think I got the party scene and "Many Happy Returns" fixed nicely - you might listen for the next minute after that to see if I realigned everything afterwards better.
wow you did blend in Jimmie's comments nicely. This works excellently. The happy returns are still a bit too long LOL but yes it probably should show the whole enthusiasm.

> at 26:57: the stage directions "Jimmie battling with the men" are not too clearly understandable here, I was wondering whether you subdue the background mayhem here a bit more or make Larry louder to hear him better. Jimmie's voice is easier heard over the din, but the narrator is a bit difficult. :hmm: Is it too late to change volume here ?

If it doesn't work, it's PL ok. An excellent assembling. :clap: You outdid yourself again, Todd.

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Kitty wrote: October 29th, 2019, 5:59 am
ToddHW wrote: October 28th, 2019, 2:24 pmOkay, I think I got the party scene and "Many Happy Returns" fixed nicely - you might listen for the next minute after that to see if I realigned everything afterwards better.
wow you did blend in Jimmie's comments nicely. This works excellently. The happy returns are still a bit too long LOL but yes it probably should show the whole enthusiasm.

> at 26:57: the stage directions "Jimmie battling with the men" are not too clearly understandable here, I was wondering whether you subdue the background mayhem here a bit more or make Larry louder to hear him better. Jimmie's voice is easier heard over the din, but the narrator is a bit difficult. :hmm: Is it too late to change volume here ?

If it doesn't work, it's PL ok. An excellent assembling. :clap: You outdid yourself again, Todd.

Sonia
I can boost the narration there without problem. Done, ready for spot PL.

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ToddHW wrote: October 29th, 2019, 9:07 am I can boost the narration there without problem. Done, ready for spot PL.
*and finally she was happy*

PL ok now. Really well done :thumbs: (sorry for being such a pain)

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I am halfway through Act 3....

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Act 3 is ready for final PL. Some astoundingly wonderful performances!

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ToddHW wrote: October 31st, 2019, 9:12 am Act 3 is ready for final PL. Some astoundingly wonderful performances!
this was brilliant performance. Well, already the first half was excellent from the whole cast, but what was really a highlight was the steamy dialogue between Jeyes and Lilly in the second half. Absolutely strong performance there, by both of them. :thumbs:

Everything perfectly assembled, I don't think I need to make any PL notes this time. :mrgreen: (I know - a rare occurence :lol: )

PL ok

Wonderful job, Todd ! Thanks

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Act 4 is in the MW ready for final PL. Wonderful play, and so well acted, all of you!

By the way, here's the cast list. Does it look okay? I think I removed all the non-speaking people from the list.

<BR><BR>Cast list:<BR>
Viscount Farncombe: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10789">Tomas Peter</a><br>
Colonel the Hon. Arthur Stidulph: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/7170">alanmapstone</a><br>
Baron von Rettenmayer: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/11535">Nemo</a><br>
Captain Nicholas Jeyes: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13072">Campbell Schelp</a><br>
Lionel Roper: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/9905">Hamlet</a><br>
Sam de Castro: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/12874">Aaron White</a><br>
Herbert Fulkerson: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13177">Frédéric Surget</a><br>
Stewart Heneage: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13278">KevinS</a><br>
Gerald Grimwood: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10995">April 6090</a><br>
Carlton Smythe (Manager of the Pandora Theatre): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13489">James Thomas</a><br>
Albert Palk (Actor at the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10087">Sandra Schmit</a><br>
Wilfrid Tavish (Actor at the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13403">Philip Watson</a><br>
Vincent Bland (A Musical Composer, attached to the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/6754">ToddHW</a><br>
Morris Cooling (Business Manager at the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10801">Jim Locke</a><br>
Luigi (Maître d’hôtel at Catani’s Restaurant): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/12428">Pier</a><br>
The Hon. Mrs. Arthur Stidulph (Formerly, as Dolly Ensor, of the Pandora Theatre): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/11790">TJ Burns</a><br>
Lily Parradell (Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/12500">Foon</a><br>
Jimmie Birch (Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10179">Sonia</a><br>
Gabrielle Kato (Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/12823">Pauline Latournerie</a><br>
Enid Moncrieff (Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10614">Leanne Yau</a><br>
Daphne Dure (Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/12923">EmmaHatton</a><br>
Nita Trevenna (Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13139">Lex Hankins</a><br>
Flo Connify (One of Four Beauties Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/11417">Eva Davis</a><br>
Sybil Dermott (One of Four Beauties Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/4174">Availle</a><br>
Olga Cook (One of Four Beauties Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/11084">Devorah Allen</a><br>
Evangeline Ventris (One of Four Beauties Of the Pandora): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/13257">Elsie Selwyn</a><br>
Mrs. Upjohn (Lily Parradell’s mother): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/12993">DuckTD</a><br>
Gladys (Lily’s parlourmaid): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/11417">Eva Davis</a><br>
Maud (Lily’s maid): <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/10614">Leanne Yau</a><br>
Stage Directions: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/8425">Larry Wilson</a><br>
Edited by: <a href="https://librivox.org/reader/6754">ToddHW</a><br>

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Sonia,

I can't figure out how "lunta4los" got into the MW for Luigi. There is no posting in this project forum under that name. Shows up as "Pier" in the cast list so obviously already has a reader number, so I don't want to add "lunta4los" as a new reader and maybe really mess things up. But I need to put the reader name into Act 2 somehow....

Do you recall what happened?

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ToddHW wrote: November 1st, 2019, 4:56 am Sonia,

I can't figure out how "lunta4los" got into the MW for Luigi. There is no posting in this project forum under that name. Shows up as "Pier" in the cast list so obviously already has a reader number, so I don't want to add "lunta4los" as a new reader and maybe really mess things up. But I need to put the reader name into Act 2 somehow....

Do you recall what happened?

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Never mind - that first letter is an "I" not a small "L". Confusing typeface we've chosen for the MW Section Complier...

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ToddHW wrote: November 1st, 2019, 4:59 amNever mind - that first letter is an "I" not a small "L". Confusing typeface we've chosen for the MW Section Complier...
yes, it's a capital 'i' at the beginning and also in the middle. But you found out for yourself. The setlist looks good to me.

And as for Act 4: it's perfectly PL ok. Wouldn't change a thing. Excellent finale. :clap: I love the merging when Roper, Ma and Jimmie are crowding in on Lily. :thumbs:

Well, we're at the end here, you can proceed to catalogue 8-)

Great job !

Thanks for the entertaining listen.

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