COMPLETE[PLAY]The "Mind The Paint" Girl by Pinero - thw

Post by **ToddHW** » October 4th, 2019, 4:50 pm

The shift of the line was intentional. But as I didn't do it for other places (I hadn't noticed them), I have put this back the way it was before as you suggest.

Thanks, Todd

Post by **Kitty** » October 5th, 2019, 1:32 am

ToddHW wrote: ↑October 4th, 2019, 4:50 pmThe shift of the line was intentional.

yes I had a feeling that was your intention, and the idea was a cool one actually, but yes, then it would have been best to have it done with all of those actions. In fact the narrator is giving us a spoiler preview of the next scene here

Act 1 is now perfectly PL ok.

thank you

Sonia

Hamlet · Post by **Hamlet** » October 10th, 2019, 8:02 am

Act two for Roper is done.

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_2_128kb.mp3

I did remember to read the "Men" lines, but I made an exception with "Some of the Men" when they are laughing since they seem to be laughing at Roper's comment. I can add it if you want.

Brad

Post by **Kitty** » October 10th, 2019, 8:16 am

Hamlet wrote: ↑October 10th, 2019, 8:02 amI did remember to read the "Men" lines, but I made an exception with "Some of the Men" when they are laughing since they seem to be laughing at Roper's comment. I can add it if you want.

no that's fine, if it's obvious that Roper didn't join, in this case you seem to have made the right call. I also check whether the men are even present at that point

Will have a listen later on, thank you so much, Brad.

So Todd will be able to stitch together another act when he comes home again.

Sonia

Post by **Kitty** » October 10th, 2019, 8:45 am

Hamlet wrote: ↑October 10th, 2019, 8:02 amAct two for Roper is done.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_2_128kb.mp3

excellent job, Brad. Oh my....Roper's over-enthusiastic bad jokes and comments would be getting on my nerves if I had to meet him

He is quite the life at parties it seems, always trying to run the show everywhere.

I fully agree for the omitted "men" lines.

I only have one optional note for your consideration:

> at 3:43: "I say, look at ’Vangy!" I would have expected this name to be pronounced "Vanjy" since it's the abbreviation of Evangeline. But it's up to you. Roper can well have his own quirky way of saying it LOL

Just let me know whether you want to change it or not

Thanks

Sonia

Hamlet · Post by **Hamlet** » October 10th, 2019, 9:37 am

I was wondering about the pronunciation of the name myself. I think I'll change it to your way, but I won't have time today. I do it when I do the next act.

Thanks.

Brad

Hamlet · Post by **Hamlet** » October 23rd, 2019, 10:17 am

Correction to Act Two made, and here are the final two acts are complete as well:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_2_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_3_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_4_128kb.mp3

Brad

Post by **ToddHW** » October 23rd, 2019, 12:52 pm

Thank you! "Our favourite DPL hussy" (her words, not mine!) will be along soon for PL

Todd

Post by **Kitty** » October 23rd, 2019, 11:55 pm

ToddHW wrote:Thank you! "Our favourite DPL hussy" (her words, not mine!) will be along soon for PL

*groan* I should have known that you would jump on this.

Hamlet wrote:Correction to Act Two made, and here are the final two acts are complete as well:

excellent job, Brad. I especially love the final act where Roper is finally starting to squirm a little bit when his scheme seems to fail.

He has a brief moment of humility and self-doubt there before going back to his old meddling self.

You managed to create a great character there, I am glad you took the role.

Acts 2 and 4 are already PL ok and Todd can finish the editing

I have a few notes for Act 3 though:

> at about 0:34: three missing lines:
“Be they ebon or blond, Of the gals I am fond;——”! Ha, ha, ha, ha!"
"Choose your partners, gents!"
"Jimmie——!"

> at about 0:58: three missing ALL lines:
"Bravo, Carlton! Bravo, Smythe!"
"Bravo, Morrie!"
"Ha, ha, ha, ha!"

> at 2:02: between "God bless you both" and "I, I, I—" since you have to reupload anyway, maybe also leave a bit more space here for the stage directions

> at 2:14: between "Hahaha" and "Wurr-roo" – also here maybe make it easier on Todd by inserting some more fiddling space

Thank you !

Sonia

Post by **ToddHW** » October 24th, 2019, 11:42 am

Acts 2 and 4 assembled. Got a lot of grooming work to do to finish them cuz of all the simultaneous lines throughout.

Thanks, Todd

Hamlet · Post by **Hamlet** » October 24th, 2019, 12:03 pm

Corrections to Act Three

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_3_128kb.mp3

Brad

Post by **ToddHW** » October 24th, 2019, 1:09 pm

Thank you!

Todd

Post by **Kitty** » October 24th, 2019, 11:32 pm

Hamlet wrote: ↑October 24th, 2019, 12:03 pm Corrections to Act Three
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/mindthepaintgirl_roper_3_128kb.mp3

thank you, Brad, all PL ok now.

So looking forward to hearing you all in the finished play. I think we have a dream cast again

Sonia

Post by **ToddHW** » October 25th, 2019, 5:23 am

Act 3 also assembled. A lot of work to finish these off - every act is near or over an hour - but should be done this weekend. And I want to hear what this sounds like!

Thanks, Todd

Post by **ToddHW** » October 26th, 2019, 6:18 pm

Act 2 is ready for final PL. You all sound so great!

Thanks, Todd