silverquill wrote: ↑
June 11th, 2019, 6:49 am
This should help -- Stage directions for Act I.
I've tried my best to get all the lines and make a few corrections.
ok this took a bit of time, Pinero is always a lot to listen to. First of all, that was sooo sweet when you gave that little chuckle after the slipper-ceremony. It sounded so honestly amused by it all. I adored this bit !
That really puts the narrator totally among the cast.
Let me know if you want something different for the Persons of the Play.
you omitted a few things that were written in the MW, like "the four beauties of the Pandora" but I think all 4 readers already gave us the correct credits. I would say, it can be left like this. I know you'll be around if we need a last-minute addition from the narrator, then you can always do it then.
However, there are quite a few missing lines in Act 1, which need to be inserted. Best of course to start from the end, so my time-stamps stay correct for you. Here's the list:
> at 0:01
: for the disclaimer you would have to start with “Act 1 of
The Mind the Paint Girl”
> at 2:31
: “The action of the piece
takes place in London” – you say “pieces”
> at about 7:31
: “singing” – might be optional in case the reader is singing this, but better include it, just in case
> at about 7:36
: “Farncombe nods”
> at about 8:26
: “Mrs Upjohn enters.”
> at about 8:42
> at about 11:33
> at about 11:39
: two things missing: “Roper, sarcastically” and “stopping before Mrs. Upjohn”
> at about 16:47
: “to Mrs Upjohn”
> at about 17:18
: “passing him”
> at about 17:38
: “Roper, Taking the fan from Mrs Upjohn
> at about 25:27
: “To Jimmie and de Castro.”
> at 30:04
: “and she returns his look with awakened
interest” – you say “awkward”
> at about 42:57
: “meeting his eyes”
Then I have a note to Todd
> at 5:26-5:32
: “Note: Throughout, “right” and “left” are the spectators’ right and left, not the actor’s.” – I think this note is not important, and could be cut out, but I let Todd decide. So for the moment, let's leave it in
Thank you, Larry !