Availle wrote: ↑
March 2nd, 2019, 7:00 pm
Thank you so much for your patience! I hope the wait was worth it, for here comes Margery:
oh wow this is excellent
how can anybody be soooo naive like Margery. She may actually be smarter and only play the naive to get her ways.
This whole script reminds me extremely of one of Molière's, especially the innocent wife part.
Wonderfully portrayed Availle, I believe this is a change from your usual repertoire. Great job.
is already PL ok
, but I have a few small notes for the other acts...
> at 1:15
: "Pish, you jeer
!" - you say "dear
> at 2:16
"Ay, dear bud" - can be cut out
> at 4:43
"I vow, husband, he'll ne'er believe"
> at 8:51
: "Well, 'tis e'en
so" - you say "eleven" but this means "even
" , "it's even so..."
> at 0:41
: "but I had rather she
should be angry with me
, bud" - if I may make a suggestion for intonation, Margery here meant: "but I had rather SHE
should be angry with me than YOU
> at 5:40
: "pray, don't you go to make poor Mr. Horner
believe to the contrary" - you say "Mr poor Horner
", which sounds a bit strange
> at about 5:58
: missing ALL line: "Ay, ay, ay.
> at 6:17
: "And I must be a country wife still too" - can be cut out
thanks ! This is a huge boost towards the end, Margery was a central figure.