COMPLETE The Houses of Sin by Vincent O'Sullivan -ck

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clarksonr
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Post by clarksonr » August 20th, 2018, 3:40 pm

Lmnei wrote:
August 19th, 2018, 5:26 pm
Hi Clarkson!

As there is no DPL yet I have reviewed your poems for you. They were really great to listen to! You have done a wonderful job of recording them and I can hear your passion when recording which is great!

Here is the feedback for each section -

Section 2
1:18 – mien – should be like meen – rhymes with queen in sentence below
2:49 – I heard untreating eyes – should be entreating eyes
Please leave closer to 5 seconds at the end of the poem.

Section 3
56.5 – heard sweetest – should be sweet

Section 5
1:38 – heard wildness – should be wilderness
2:14 – heard Her dreams – should be He dreams
Please leave closer to 5 seconds at the end of the poem.

Section 6
Your volume is just a bit below the range at 85.9 dB – use Amplify to get it closer to 89 dB please - if you need help just let me know!
Reading is perfect.

Section 7
Your volume is just a bit below the range at 85.9 dB – use Amplify to get it closer to 89 dB - same as above :help:
There are 2 more verses that were not read on page 25 that need to be appended to the end of the poem please.
I am not sure if all the bracketed portions of Part 3 need to be whispered - I can see it for the first verse however I generally do not whisper bracketed sections - I just read them normally as whispering can be hard to understand or hear. It is up to you though as the reader - I was just sharing what I generally do. :)

So if you can make those minor changes then post the links and new times Carolin will be able to update the Magic Window and someone will Spot Check them so they can get approved.

It was a pleasure listening to your work. :thumbs:

Lynda
Corrected Submissions

2 - The Houses of Sin - 3:28 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_02_osullivan_128kb.mp3

3 - Malaria - 1:07 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_03_osullivan_128kb.mp3

5 - The Verge - 2:28 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_05_osullivan_128kb.mp3

6 - Drug - 1:03 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_06_osullivan_128kb.mp3

7 - Three Moments - 3:04 - https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_07_osullivan_128kb.mp3
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Post by Annalisa56 » August 21st, 2018, 4:38 pm

Hi Carolin!
Love getting to do some scary stuff right before Halloween!
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_01_osullivan_128kb.mp3. 1:27.61
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_10_osullivan_128kb.mp3. 1:52.48

I put the standard intro for the first poem. The MW said prelude but the poem isn't titled. If you want the shorter intro I will fix it.

Thank you,
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Post by Lmnei » August 21st, 2018, 5:03 pm


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Post by Carolin » August 22nd, 2018, 11:57 pm

thank you all!
Carolin

Let me know if you are looking for a book suggestion for your next solo project!

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Post by terrybenn » August 23rd, 2018, 5:27 am

Let's see if we can get ya'll caught up.

1 PL OK
8 PL OK
9 PL OK
10 PL OK

17 1:29 should be gibes, not gibs

18 :43 ...o'er the waiting brood... should read the wailing brood
1:37 Err you kiss...should be Ere you kiss

20 :08 repeat of Read for... Keep 2nd one. First has an error.
2:59 ...the wise... should be this wise
3:09 ...clear surprise... should be dear surprise
4:10 repeat ...of witching flower you dipped... keep 2nd. First has error.
4:20 ...the dewy... should be their dewy
4:54 ...gib... should be gibes
5:09 repeat of line. Keep 2nd. Error in first.

21 :53 err while should be ere while

23 :26 repeated line. Keep 2nd. First has error.

24 PL OK
26 PL OK
29 PL OK

That should do it for now.

T

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Post by NinthProphet » August 23rd, 2018, 11:19 am

15 took a lot of takes >.>
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_14_osullivan_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_15_osullivan_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_16_osullivan_128kb.mp3

EDIT: Caught a pronunciation error in section 16, out of time to re-record until tomorrow evening, will correct "mien" in the 3rd paragraph
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Post by Lmnei » August 23rd, 2018, 6:48 pm


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Post by terrybenn » August 24th, 2018, 3:10 am

Thanks, Lynda.

17, 18, 21 and 23 are PL OK

20 still has 1 error at 4:47. It says gibs, when it should be gibes. Other than that 1 everything is corrected in this one.

T

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Post by Lmnei » August 24th, 2018, 3:15 am

terrybenn wrote:
August 24th, 2018, 3:10 am
20 still has 1 error at 4:47. It says gibs, when it should be gibes. Other than that 1 everything is corrected in this one.

T
Sorry! Right on it!

L.

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Post by Lmnei » August 24th, 2018, 3:26 am

Lmnei wrote:
August 24th, 2018, 3:15 am
terrybenn wrote:
August 24th, 2018, 3:10 am
20 still has 1 error at 4:47. It says gibs, when it should be gibes. Other than that 1 everything is corrected in this one.

T
Sorry! Right on it!

L.
Here is the last correction done - it is at about the 4:46 mark now.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_20_osullivan_128kb.mp3 - 5:30

Lynda

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Post by terrybenn » August 24th, 2018, 3:29 am

NinthProphet, I PLed yours. First as a personal note let me say, "Dude, I could listen to you read a grocery list!" Love the voice. End personal note. :lol:

Now to work,

All 3 are missing the closing. If you refer to the directions: 'At the end, say: "End of poem. This recording is in the public domain." and leave five seconds of silence.' Silence is right, just need to add in the words.

For 15, Borgia in the title is mispronounced. It's Borjah in pronunciation. G is soft in this one. Not a major thing, but in the title it really stands out.

In 16 as you noted mien is mispronounced.

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Post by terrybenn » August 24th, 2018, 3:30 am

Lmnei wrote:
August 24th, 2018, 3:26 am
Lmnei wrote:
August 24th, 2018, 3:15 am
terrybenn wrote:
August 24th, 2018, 3:10 am
20 still has 1 error at 4:47. It says gibs, when it should be gibes. Other than that 1 everything is corrected in this one.

T
Sorry! Right on it!

L.
Here is the last correction done - it is at about the 4:46 mark now.

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_20_osullivan_128kb.mp3 - 5:30

Lynda
It still says gibs. Did you put up the right recording?

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Post by terrybenn » August 24th, 2018, 3:44 am

Carolin, I'll DPL, if you don't mind, since I've done so much of the PL already.

Okay, a recap so we know where we are.

12 and 27 have not been submitted yet.

14, 15, 16 have notes.

20 is being fixed now.

All others are PL OK.

So we're almost done.

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Post by NinthProphet » August 24th, 2018, 10:49 pm

Fixed parts 14, 15 and 16

https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_14_osullivan_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_15_osullivan_128kb.mp3
https://librivox.org/uploads/carolin/housesofsin_16_osullivan_128kb.mp3

I did splice in new audio with old, but did my best to blend it in seamlessly - let me know if it's noticeable to anyone with a better ear/equipment! Any critique is welcome, and appreciated :thumbs:
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Post by svonb002 » August 25th, 2018, 6:37 pm

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