COMPLETE[PLAY]Trelawny of the Wells by Pinero - thw

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Post by Kitty » December 11th, 2018, 6:32 am

AidanIrishman wrote:
December 11th, 2018, 6:25 am
Herewith, is the amended audio mp3 file. You are always so kind and gracious in your writing. Thank you.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/trelawnyofthewells_odwyer_act4_128kb.mp3
Should there be further corrections, please let me know.
no more corrections needed, this is totally PL ok and a great addition to the already wonderful cast. :9:

Thank you, and I hope I hear you soon in another play ;)

TODD !!!! that means Acts 3 and 4 are ready for a final edit :D :D we have all the characters in.

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Post by ToddHW » December 11th, 2018, 8:34 am

Got it. Draft of Act 3 ready for me to groom; I'll do a draft of 4 and then groom them both.

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Post by PeterMusgrove » December 11th, 2018, 11:17 am

Hello Todd,

I'd like to claim Captain de Foenix please.

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Post by ToddHW » December 11th, 2018, 4:17 pm

PeterMusgrove wrote:
December 11th, 2018, 11:17 am
Hello Todd,

I'd like to claim Captain de Foenix please.

Best,
Pete
Thank you.

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Post by PeterMusgrove » December 11th, 2018, 7:58 pm

Hi Todd,

I would very much like to play Charles also please.

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Post by Kitty » December 12th, 2018, 1:02 am

PeterMusgrove wrote:
December 11th, 2018, 7:58 pm
I would very much like to play Charles also please.
I see Todd assigned it to you already, so have fun. Looking forward to both your accents :lol:

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Post by ToddHW » December 12th, 2018, 2:31 pm

Act 3 ready for Final PL.

Even though you'l be listening out of order (since Acts 1 and 2 aren't ready yet), I think the act works well enough standalone to not be confusing. In fact, you could probably get away with Act 3 as a one act play. What happens before Act 3 is not crucial, and what happens in Pinero's act 4 is but one of a number of possibilities that could happen after this....

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Post by Kitty » December 13th, 2018, 3:43 am

ToddHW wrote:
December 12th, 2018, 2:31 pm
Even though you'l be listening out of order (since Acts 1 and 2 aren't ready yet), I think the act works well enough standalone to not be confusing. In fact, you could probably get away with Act 3 as a one act play. What happens before Act 3 is not crucial, and what happens in Pinero's act 4 is but one of a number of possibilities that could happen after this....
you're so right, Todd, this could have been a stand-alone, most of the previous plot is revealed through the discussions, so people would understand the situation even if they only heard this act. And I don't mind listening out of order anyway.

This is a grand act, everybody was playing their roles to perfection and it's skillfully assembled. :clap: Great job and looking forward to the rest.

I would only suggest (you knew I would :lol: ) a few cuttings for the stage directions, in places where they are not needed and where I think the pacing of the dialogue should not be interrupted, to make it more fluent:

> at 6:37: “Avonia, shrilly” – Leanne is shrill enough in her reply and it makes the dialogue pace smoother
> at 8:19: “Drawing a long breath” – Tomas gives us a nice long breath here
> at 8:35: “Tom, testily” - it would flow better without interruption
> at 30:33: “Tom, quietly”
> at 50:08: “Imogen, shrilly”
> at 54:41: “Imogen, shrilly” – this definitely needs to be cut, so the "No – No - Yes!" comes as rapid-fire for perfect comedic effect

As always, they're only suggestions :)

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Post by catharmaiden » December 13th, 2018, 3:54 am

I'll claim Clara de Foenix :)

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Post by Kitty » December 13th, 2018, 4:45 am

catharmaiden wrote:
December 13th, 2018, 3:54 am
I'll claim Clara de Foenix :)
yay yay yay, thank you, Sandra. :9:

Only one role left to claim !!!

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Post by ToddHW » December 13th, 2018, 5:45 am

Act 3 corrected as suggested.

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Post by Kitty » December 13th, 2018, 6:03 am

ToddHW wrote:
December 13th, 2018, 5:45 am
Act 3 corrected as suggested.
great ! sounds even cooler now ! 8-)

Act 3 PL ok. :clap:

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Post by Kitty » December 13th, 2018, 12:12 pm

catharmaiden wrote:
December 13th, 2018, 12:03 pm
and here is Clara: https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/trelawnyofthewells_clara_2_128kb.mp3 (1:09)
thank you for the quick turn-around, Sandra :) and Clara is wonderfully portrayed. Kinda subdued throughout the act, especially when talking to her awe-inspiring grandpa, but then in the final sentence she shows that she is having a will of her own after all. :thumbs: Well done !

And PL ok.

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Post by ToddHW » December 13th, 2018, 1:47 pm

Act 4 ready for final PL.

Thanks, Todd

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