COMPLETE[PLAY]The Twin-Rivals by George Farquhar - thw

Post by **Kitty** » September 9th, 2018, 8:55 am

jfgallagher wrote: ↑September 8th, 2018, 8:28 pm Well, it has been a rainy Saturday...so I had plenty of time to record!
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_trueman_2.mp3 recording time 03:35
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_trueman_3.mp3 recording time 01:18
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_trueman_4.mp3 recording time 01:53
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_trueman_5.mp3 recording time 11:04
Please let me know what I need to work on!

well I'm back and had a listen through it all. Wonderful play-acting, Jim

Trueman really deserves his name, he's such an upright, honest man and you play his forceful scenes where he is outraged, very well. The whole part is excellently characterized. And I found no missing lines.

Only one single thing needs correcting and that is the voice credit:

> could you please give us the entire description: "Captain Trueman, his Nephew, and friend to Hermes Wouldbe, read by Jim Gallagher"

you could maybe insert that at the beginning of Act 2, then I'll mark all the other acts PL ok already.

Thanks for joining this play

And that means, Acts 2, 4 and 5 are totally ready to be assembled, Todd !!!!!! You've got work to do.

Sonia

jfgallagher · Post by **jfgallagher** » September 9th, 2018, 10:05 am

Well, I made a mental note to pencil in the full character name at the top of my script...but I must have run out of ink!

I will have it to you later today.

Jim

Post by **ToddHW** » September 9th, 2018, 1:11 pm

Great.

Thanks, Todd

jfgallagher · Post by **jfgallagher** » September 9th, 2018, 3:22 pm

Here is Captain Trueman from Act II, with the revised intro:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_trueman_2.mp3 recording time 03:33

Rather than drag everything out again I recorded it on my phone. I like it enough that I'm thinking about doing a lot more recording with my phone!

Please let me know if there is anything else that needs my attention.

Jim

benderca · Post by **benderca** » September 9th, 2018, 3:35 pm

jfgallagher wrote: ↑September 9th, 2018, 3:22 pm Here is Captain Trueman from Act II, with the revised intro:

Yay! My hero has finally arrived to save the day!

Post by **ToddHW** » September 9th, 2018, 4:09 pm

I have updated all the five act drafts with the parts we have so far. If only the Alderman would arrive!

Thanks, Todd

silverquill · Post by **silverquill** » September 10th, 2018, 8:29 am

Love to play the groveling Alderman.
Recording in a few minutes.

Post by **Kitty** » September 10th, 2018, 10:44 am

silverquill wrote: ↑September 10th, 2018, 8:29 am Love to play the groveling Alderman.
Recording in a few minutes.

Larry !!! so great you're jumping in here.

That will make this play fully claimed and we're almost done.

Enjoy the grovelling

Sonia

Post by **ToddHW** » September 10th, 2018, 3:45 pm

Acts 1 and 2 read for final PL (except for the missing Alderman voice credit).

Thanks, Todd

silverquill · Post by **silverquill** » September 10th, 2018, 9:13 pm

Oh, I got so many interruptions this morning just editing this short file!
Then discovered I was still in the wrong time zone.

Anyway, here is the Alderman.

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_alderrman_3.mp3

Post by **Kitty** » September 10th, 2018, 11:57 pm

silverquill wrote: ↑September 10th, 2018, 9:13 pm Oh, I got so many interruptions this morning just editing this short file!
Then discovered I was still in the wrong time zone.

does that mean you got up way too early this morning ?

Anyway, here is the Alderman.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/twinrivals_alderrman_3.mp3

wonderful performance, Larry. I'm so glad you took this role. You really gave this man a jovial, but sycophantic character and it's well played out.

And nothing missing, so it's PL ok.

Thanks so much for jumping in at the last minute.

And that means, we have all the roles in

Todd, I will PL some other jobs first, maybe when I get to Act 1 in a few hours, you may have inserted Larry's voice credit already.

Sonia

Post by **Kitty** » September 11th, 2018, 2:14 am

ok, I started with Act 2 first. Wonderful acting by all of us

It's really great to hear all the schemes and plots come together in dialogues now. Ohhh we are all such perfect rogues.

Aurelia, Constance and Trueman excepted - they are the good guys, but equally well acted out.

Excellently assembled, Todd. I only have one small request:

> at 27:06: “Hah !” compared to the rest of the volume, this exclamation hurt my ears. I think with -5 dB it would be loud enough, so that innocent listeners won’t get a heart attack.

Will start on Act 1 now after all... too eager to hear it.

Sonia

Post by **Kitty** » September 11th, 2018, 3:17 am

Act 1 is a perfect start into the play.

I'm amazed so few people have only been introduced in the first act. But the great characters make it very interesting. I was hooked from the start.

A few notes here:

> at about 2:01: missing voice credit for Alderman

> at 6:35: (p. 12): missing stage directions “whispers”. I think that is needed here because Richmore’s exclamation surely is the result of what is whispered to him

> at 16:51: (p. 17): stage direction “drinks” – I think that maybe this should be put at 16:49, after Benjamin Wouldbe says “I’ll pledge you, Mr Balderdash.” Doesn't it make more sense that Wouldbe would drink and not the vintner ?

The rest totally fine, as always.

Sonia

Post by **ToddHW** » September 11th, 2018, 5:32 am

Acts 1 and 2 fixed as suggested; Act 3 also ready for PL.

Love the way the voices all go together!

Thanks, Todd

Post by **Kitty** » September 11th, 2018, 6:38 am

ToddHW wrote: ↑September 11th, 2018, 5:32 am Acts 1 and 2 fixed as suggested; Act 3 also ready for PL.

Act 2 is now PL ok

Concerning Act 1:

> at 6:28:”Benjamin Wouldbe whispers” – no sorry, I explained this badly.

I didn’t mean that he would whisper all the following sentences. I think after “Harkee” he will whisper something that is not in the script and the audience won’t hear. Probably some scandal about a woman. And that’s why Richmore exclaims “How !” So in my opinion it should run:

Harkee ... (whispers) .... How !

but if you are not of that opinion, we can also leave it as you wish.

Sonia