thank you Ava ! Wow, a huge feat you have performed here.
I was listening to all this with a slight fever, so I hope I have not missed anything. But the mood I was in somehow enhanced my listening experience to Orra's descent into madness, so maybe it was a good thing I listened to it now.
An overall comment I will make in the MW is that the volume is definitely not loud enough (only about 83-86 dB mostly) But Chuck can take care of that in the editing process. We need Orra to sound loud ! Wouldn't do that her voice got lost in the others' comments.
: PL ok
I mentioned it before and I have to say it again, that I love your laughs in the plays. Wish I could do them like that
special highlight for me in this scene is the excitement in your voice when you want to hear the horrid ghost story
> at 9:44
: (p. 36 bottom) "And let my dull hours by
the dead man's watch be told" - you say "be
the dead man's watch", which makes the sentence sound strange
my compliments: the inner confllict between the fear of the supernatural and the reluctance at waking Rudigere is excellently played out in this scene
> at 2:46
: (p. 50 middle): "To make my thraldom
sure?" - I think I hear "theldram" here, but the correct word is "thral-dom" (like "en-thrall
" and "king-dom
> at 6:44
: (p. 72 middle): "He will be here to free me from this thraldom
" - same problem here with "theldram" (unless my ears are mistaking me, the volume is a bit low)
: PL ok
kudos ! you can play a very convincing mad-woman
I love your dramatic acting in this scene. Especially the final speech is an excellent ending to it all. Quite recently I watched the series Penny Dreadful and this reminds me of some scenes in the lunatic asylum with Eva Green.
> at about 0:03
: (p. 90 top): "(A shriek
heard from the cave) - this is optional
, but maybe you want to give us a shriek ? I think it would be cool to have first the stage directions read out, and then the shriek following (at the least the audience will be warned)