[COMPLETE] Mystery of the Ravenspurs by Fred M. White-ans

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 23rd, 2017, 7:48 am

Ready for some Tchigorsky back story?

Chapter 39 has been posted.
Thanks!!

Post by **Kitty** » June 23rd, 2017, 2:59 pm

*shudder* to think that Tchigorsky and Ralph nearly escaped brain-surgery and brain-washing

And now Geoffrey has to play dead...Mrs May will be astonished when she realizes how many people are still alive later on LOL

PL ok

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 26th, 2017, 7:39 am

And a bit more.
Chapter 40, uploaded and posted.

Thanks!

Post by **Kitty** » June 26th, 2017, 10:03 am

Yikes ! The iron cage torture was awful

Well now the scars in their faces have been amply explained. Interesting chapter. I see this as a longish scene if ever the movie is made

found a small error (I think, you can decide)

> at 4:05: " A second later and the horizontal bars over my face were white hot." - you say "over my head" but I think "face" is a bit more correct in this situation. If the bars had been over his head they probably would have done no harm

or is my understanding of these two words incorrect ?

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 26th, 2017, 3:06 pm

That was a good catch! "Face" would definitely be more appropriate, and so I have made the necessary change.
Chapter 40, patched and re-uploaded.

Thanks!!

Post by **Kitty** » June 26th, 2017, 11:48 pm

Chapter 40 PL ok now

I'm always glad to be of help.

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 27th, 2017, 10:36 am

Chapter 41 has been posted.
Thanks!!

Post by **Kitty** » June 27th, 2017, 1:09 pm

ah Vera is told after all. I almost thought she would in turn also tell Marion, and soon everybody would know LOL

one note (might be trivial):

> at 12:32: "I have even been so weak as to allow the secret of my life to escape me." - you say "ever" which technically changes the meaning a bit. But I'm not sure if it's really noticeable that much. I let you decide whether you want to change it

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 28th, 2017, 7:36 am

I definitely agree this should be changed, and I have thus made the modification.

Chapter 41 has been patched and re-uploaded.
Thanks for a good find!

Post by **Kitty** » June 28th, 2017, 9:10 am

and Chapter 41 is PL ok

wonderfully patched.

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 30th, 2017, 9:19 am

Chapter 42 has been posted.
Thanks!

Post by **Kitty** » June 30th, 2017, 10:15 am

I pity the old Ravenspur that he has to go through the mourning of Geoffrey, although he is still alive

Somehow this whole charade seems overplayed.

Oh and I learnt a new pronunciation today: never would have thought "gunwale" was "gunnel", I probably would have pronounced it "gun-wail"

I immediately had to look it up on wiktionary when I heard it. Are you a seasoned seaman, by any chance ?

Well done, yet again. PL ok

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » June 30th, 2017, 11:47 am

Born and raised by the ocean, but by no means an expert seasoned seaman, although I spent a lot of time on the open seas when I was younger.
Seamanship has its own vocabulary, believe me. If you ever see a sea-related term that you're not certain of, I'd suggest looking it up, or asking somebody.
The most common error I've found is boatswain. Properly pronounced it is BO-zen. (Long 'O') There are many many others, and some are difficult, even impossible to locate online.

Post by **Kitty** » June 30th, 2017, 11:52 am

Roger wrote:Born and raised by the ocean, but by no means an expert seasoned seaman, although I spent a lot of time on the open seas when I was younger.

unfortunately Luxembourg is land-locked, so we need to travel a few hours to get to the coast.

Seamanship has its own vocabulary, believe me. If you ever see a sea-related term that you're not certain of, I'd suggest looking it up, or asking somebody.

well I know who to ask now

The most common error I've found is boatswain. Properly pronounced it is BO-zen.

NO ! what happened to the poor Swain in there ? LOL I'll definitely look those terms up before I make a fool of myself

Sonia

Roger · Post by **Roger** » July 1st, 2017, 9:59 am

Luxembourg! I did not know you were from Luxembourg. How fascinating. It's no wonder you are so proficient in so many languages.

Chapter 43 has been uploaded and is ready for a listen at your convenience.
Thanks!!