[COMPLETE] LOOK TO THE STARS - philc

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Chapter 2 PL note:

All okay except the intro as with chapter 1. Should be: Chapter [number] of [book title]. LibriVox disclaimer. [Book title] by [author]. Chapter [number].
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Thanks so much for PLing :D I've fixed everything you pointed out :)
I'm still learning a lot of new stuff everytime i do a new recording, but if you have any recommendation about what to focus improvement i'd very much appreciate it.
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i've also added a new chapter btw :)
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Sections 0, 1, and 2 now PL OK. :thumbs:

Section 0 doesn't have a title, but I suggest you put something like "Prologue" in the MW so it isn't empty.
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CHAPTER 3 PL NOTES:

2:32 - Said: Marlin stared. Text: Marlin started.
4:21 - so unfortunate as to stop lead. Lead as in the metal, not as "to lead."
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ty! :) fixed.
Also I've uploaded 3 more chapters
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Chapter 3 now PL OK.

Chapter 4 PL notes:

1:05 - "Not yet, but you can't tell." sounds like "Not yet, but you can tell."
3:31 - he followed the scientist up the winding trail. “Winding” s/b like “finding”

Chapter 5 PL notes:

9:13 I've got to find 'em sounds like We’ve got to find 'em

Chapter 6 PL notes

5:18 - it doesn't count out." sounds like it doesn't count on.”
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Thank you very much. I've fixed everything and re-uploaded it. I've uploaded four chapters more too :D
In Chapter X i tried to go slower and tried to be more fluent.
When you listen to Chapter X would you please tell me, if you don't mind, if the reading goes better/worse :D
¿Can you understand clearly everything i read? :D my perception about it goes like a rollercoaster, sometimes i think i nailed it, and some times i am not so sure of what i've done :mrgreen: :mrgreen:
Should i read slower?
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Chapter 4, 5 and 6 now PL OK.

Chapters 7, 8, 9, and 10 PL OK.
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You don’t read too fast, so don’t worry about that. You could pause a bit more between sentences, especially when lines of dialogue switch between characters. I noticed that your recent chapters are mistake-free, so I think you are on the right track.

You’re making amazing progress for your first solo. Some new soloists take almost a year to finish a project. Your recording quality is quite good, and your edits are very clean.
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sjmarky wrote: April 23rd, 2021, 4:50 pm You don’t read too fast, so don’t worry about that. You could pause a bit more between sentences, especially when lines of dialogue switch between characters. I noticed that your recent chapters are mistake-free, so I think you are on the right track.

You’re making amazing progress for your first solo. Some new soloists take almost a year to finish a project. Your recording quality is quite good, and your edits are very clean.
Thanks so much for the feedback :thumbs: :thumbs: :thumbs: i'll try to pause a bit more between sentences, it will also give me some more air to breath :D thanks a lot.
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2 chapters more added :)
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Chapter 11 PL OK.

Chapter 12 note:

7:56 - 'For one exciting hour' sounds like 'For some exciting hour'
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Thanks!
ch 12 fixed. And 2 more chapters added.
I'll start looking for another Juvenile/adventure book, but maybe easier to read, to start another solo project.
Any suggestions would be very welcome :)
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Chapter 12 now PL OK.

Chapter 13 PL note:

5:07 - 'through which ashes and solid residue could be forced' sounds like 'though which ashes and solid residue could be forced'

Chapter 14 notes:

5:29 - 'as they spread apart' sounds like 'that they spread apart'
8:27 - 'fingers closed around his windpipe.' 'Wind' should be like 'fin'
9:49 - 'forged in his smithy' 'Smithy' should be like 'pithy'
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