[COMPLETE][solo][Mystery] Cut by the County by Mary Elizabeth Braddon - kit
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Adrie, there are a few things amiss. The first two are deletions of text.
At 1:38, you have omitted "shrinking from the sight of her father and Lady Darnell."
At 8:54, omitted is "It was her husband's face" to "It was her son's face."
Both of these omissions need to be included in the text because they add to the meaning and emotion of the moment.
Then there are words that render the text somewhat illogical.
At 9:47, you say "unusual," instead of "usual."
At 15:24, "saw," but it should be "heard."
Otherwise, all is rendered well. Jim
At 1:38, you have omitted "shrinking from the sight of her father and Lady Darnell."
At 8:54, omitted is "It was her husband's face" to "It was her son's face."
Both of these omissions need to be included in the text because they add to the meaning and emotion of the moment.
Then there are words that render the text somewhat illogical.
At 9:47, you say "unusual," instead of "usual."
At 15:24, "saw," but it should be "heard."
Otherwise, all is rendered well. Jim
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Chapter 7 is fine. Fraught with confusion and anxiety! You are PL OK. Jim
P.S. You didn't mention corrections for Section 6. I assume you are going to fix and resend. Of course, there is no order. I just wondered.
P.S. You didn't mention corrections for Section 6. I assume you are going to fix and resend. Of course, there is no order. I just wondered.
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Thanks. I will see to it tomorrow. Jim
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Section 6 is now PL OK. Thank you. Jim
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And Section 8 is also PL OK. Interesting chapter! I would note that your outro length is more like six seconds than five. Just be careful not to go too long. Jim
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Chapter 9 is PL OK. The only problem I saw was that you created a new word. At 5:16, you say diminuation, instead of diminution. But it's close enough, I thought.
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PL OK for 11. But note Edinburgh is pronounced Edinborough. Jim