Complete-early scifi-SOLO Theodore Savage by Cicely Hamilton - alg

[Jmazzocchi]

Thanks 86!

I've attached new chapters 13 and 14. 13 is longer and more likely to have errors. The Cone of Silence might make it more bearable...ha...ha.

Appreciate all of your help!

Chapter 13: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_13_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 14: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_14_hamilton_128kb.mp3

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[Kalamareader]

Thanks 86!

I've attached new chapters 13 and 14. 13 is longer and more likely to have errors. The Cone of Silence might make it more bearable...ha...ha.

Appreciate all of your help!

Chapter 13: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_13_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 14: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_14_hamilton_128kb.mp3

99 out.

86 to 99. Come in 99,

Great job on 13 only two small corrections:

8:24 but he cast about in vain for a means of allaying her sodden and persistent discontent. I heard sudden. I think it gives a very visual feeling to the sentence.

20:07.5 for his basket-making You said the. I think the work his reinforces that fact that he did everything.

And 14 is even better:

11:53.5 to the buck-rabbit diving to the burrow I heard driving. This one I really hesitated on. I can kind of see the word driving, but….. So it is your call.

Great job. Quite a twist in 14. It will be interesting to see what happens.

86 out.

[Jmazzocchi]

86 you are a top notch agent! Thank you! I'll make these changes and send you the corrected chapters along with chapters 15 and 16.

Quick question...in the final chapter there are a couple of lines in French. I don't speak French, nor would anyone likely want to hear me attempt to...ha...ha. How do readers normally handle this? A friend suggested a text to speech app as the passage is basically presenting the verse as a memory of a man's statement (so could be done in a man's voice if that makes sense).

The passage is as follows:
He had forgotten the man's name--long forgotten it--but from some odd crevice in his brain a voice came echoing down the years, caressing the lines as it quoted them:--
O Corse a cheveux plats, que ta France etait belle
Au soleil de Messidor!
His own lips framed the words involuntarily, attempting the accent long unheard. "Au soleil de Messidor, au soleil de Messidor"...and his wife and children stared after him...

Let me know what you think. Thanks so much. And have a great weekend!

99

[Kalamareader]

86 you are a top notch agent! Thank you! I'll make these changes and send you the corrected chapters along with chapters 15 and 16.

Quick question...in the final chapter there are a couple of lines in French. I don't speak French, nor would anyone likely want to hear me attempt to...ha...ha. How do readers normally handle this? A friend suggested a text to speech app as the passage is basically presenting the verse as a memory of a man's statement (so could be done in a man's voice if that makes sense).

The passage is as follows:
He had forgotten the man's name--long forgotten it--but from some odd crevice in his brain a voice came echoing down the years, caressing the lines as it quoted them:--
O Corse a cheveux plats, que ta France etait belle
Au soleil de Messidor!
His own lips framed the words involuntarily, attempting the accent long unheard. "Au soleil de Messidor, au soleil de Messidor"...and his wife and children stared after him...

Let me know what you think. Thanks so much. And have a great weekend!

99

99,

I don't know how 'good' an ear you have, but you can just cut and paste it into Google Translator and in the lower left hand corner you can click on the 'speaker' icon and it will play it for you, as well, of course, translate it for you.

I know there are polygots at LV and have heard of people asking how to say something and getting a vocal file to listen to.

I think that in this situation, you just reading it and doing your best is the way to do it. I know when I have read books that have a female character, I just read it.

I know what ever you decide to do will be right. You, 99, always do the right thing and I always appreciate your assistance.

86

P.S. Messidor was the tenth month in the French Republican Calendar. The month was named after the Latin word messis, which means harvest.
The French Republican Calendar, also commonly called the French Revolutionary Calendar, was a calendar created and implemented during the French Revolution, and used by the French government for about 12 years from late 1793 to 1805.

[Isad]

Hello / Bonjour,

Quick question...in the final chapter there are a couple of lines in French. I don't speak French, nor would anyone likely want to hear me attempt to...ha...ha. How do readers normally handle this? A friend suggested a text to speech app as the passage is basically presenting the verse as a memory of a man's statement (so could be done in a man's voice if that makes sense).

The passage is as follows:
O Corse a cheveux plats, que ta France etait belle
Au soleil de Messidor!
His own lips framed the words involuntarily, attempting the accent long unheard. "Au soleil de Messidor, au soleil de Messidor"...and his wife and children stared after him...

Here is a french pronunciation
https://librivox.org/uploads/triciag/theodoresavage_french_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Have a good day / Bonne journée,
Isad

[Jmazzocchi]

Isad,

Thank you so much! I so appreciate your assistance. Very kind of you!

86...thank you for your guidance! And for the additional information about Messidor. So interesting! Recorded Chapter 23 this weekend...French and all...hopefully it doesn't cause pain to those who listen...ha...ha.

I have attached corrected Chapters 13 and 14. I've also added Chapters 15 and 16. So excited this is coming together! I've really enjoyed this and have learned so much. Already picking out my next book. Thank you so much!

Hope you have a great week.

Jennifer aka 99

Corrected Chapter 13: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_13_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Corrected Chapter 14: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_14_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 15: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_15_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 16: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_16_hamilton_128kb.mp3

[Kalamareader]

I have attached corrected Chapters 13 and 14. I've also added Chapters 15 and 16. So excited this is coming together! I've really enjoyed this and have learned so much. Already picking out my next book. Thank you so much!

Hope you have a great week.

Jennifer aka 99

Corrected Chapter 13: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_13_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Corrected Chapter 14: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_14_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 15: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_15_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 16: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_16_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Well, 99, another great, almost perfect reading. If you ever decide to get out of the spy business, you should to into narrating books. I am really into this story. And, as I said before, your voice is just the correct one for this. I don't hear me as the correct reader for this. Thank you for picking out this one and letting me listen to it.

Now, Chapters 13 and 14 are perfectly PLOK and 15 and 16 are sooooo close.

15:

6:14.5 and led him to a house that was furnished and whole You said that. I thought about this a lot, your call.

16:

9:39 when he paused in the hope of encouragement, You said lapse

14:29 If they came again. You said come

Keep up the good work. Looking forward to more.

86

[Jmazzocchi]

Thanks so much 86! Never hesitate to call out even the small errors. I want it to be as good as it possibly can be. So appreciate your help and support. I think my voice is pretty low/monotone...not ideal for high dialog or fun/playful text...but dystopian science fiction seems to work...ha...ha. Hoping to improve over time as I get more comfortable with recording. Your help and insights have been invaluable!

I'm attaching corrected Chapters 15 and 16 and adding new Chapters 17 and 18. Chapter 17 I think was one of the very first chapters I recorded since it was short so hopefully it isn't too bad.

Corrected Chapter 15: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_15_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Corrected Chapter 16: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_16_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 17: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_17_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 18: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_18_hamilton_128kb.mp3

99

[Jmazzocchi]

Oh also, in Chapter 18 I realized (too late) that I pronounced a word incorrectly. For gaolers, I pronounced it as goalers instead of jailers. So I'll correct those. Thanks!

[Kalamareader]

Thanks so much 86! Never hesitate to call out even the small errors. I want it to be as good as it possibly can be. So appreciate your help and support. I think my voice is pretty low/monotone...not ideal for high dialog or fun/playful text...but dystopian science fiction seems to work...ha...ha. Hoping to improve over time as I get more comfortable with recording. Your help and insights have been invaluable!

I'm attaching corrected Chapters 15 and 16 and adding new Chapters 17 and 18. Chapter 17 I think was one of the very first chapters I recorded since it was short so hopefully it isn't too bad.

Corrected Chapter 15: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_15_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Corrected Chapter 16: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_16_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 17: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_17_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 18: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_18_hamilton_128kb.mp3

99

99,

Great work!! Chapter 15 PLOK Chapter 16 PLOK

Chapter 17:

3:02 the rows of files You said row (you said to be picky).

~3:08 clean-fingered, at his desk. Neat-suited, You skipped a line. The words at the beginning of two sentences are exactly the same, you just jumped the line.

Chapter 18: The only problem is the gaoler. Fix those two occasions, and you will be ready for another more OK.

Interesting story. Getting a little more depressing (if that is possible) in 18.

Yours truly,

86

[Jmazzocchi]

86,

Appreciate it!

Man, I am moving slow this week. I'll get these corrections made. For now I'm loading Chapter 19 and 20 for you so you can keep the darkness going.

Chapter 19: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_19_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 20: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_20_hamilton_128kb.mp3

99

[Jmazzocchi]

Oh and here are the corrected files:

Chapter 17: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_17_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 18: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_18_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Thanks!

[Kalamareader]

86,

Appreciate it!

Man, I am moving slow this week. I'll get these corrections made. For now I'm loading Chapter 19 and 20 for you so you can keep the darkness going.

Chapter 19: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_19_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 20: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_20_hamilton_128kb.mp3

99

99

Chapters 17, 18 and 19 (right out of the box ) are all PLOK

However, there were a couple of things in 20 that need to be looked at:

4:37 paddling cautiously as they rounded each bend and always on their guard against the possibility of unfriendly meetings. Meetings was mumbled so it could not be understood.

6:13.5 All the same, on the second night of their new life Theodore, awake in the darkness, . Near the end, there is a loud 'bang' in the background. Start of page 262

13:43.5 now drying and cracked in the sun I heard dying

Yes, a 'story of the future or of the past'. We are getting awfully close to the end of the book. What will happen to them?

As I listen to this, I am sure that Ada was a Cockney. Her manner of speech, as well as the kind of 'accent' some of it is written in, points me to someone "born within the sound of the Bow Bells".

The other thing is Ada's fear of giving childbirth outside of a hospital or without the aid of a Doctor. Billions of people have been born that way and have survived, including eleven of my grandchildren.

Keep up the good work, 99! As dark as this is, I am really enjoying it and your reading of it.

86

[Jmazzocchi]

86,

As always, thank you for great proof listening. I have learned so much about what I need to do next time to make this process easier on the proof listener. So thank you beyond words for your patience and kindness!

Yes, definitely Cockney...I wasn't really able to even attempt that other than trying to read the words as they are written. Dialog...not my strong suit by a lot. So avoiding that next book for sure!

Oh and wow! What an incredible family you have!! 11 grandchildren! You must be surrounded by so much love.

I'm working on correcting Chapter 20. Hope these last ones aren't too painful. These chapters are a bit longer so no rush on feedback. We're almost done!!

Thank you again.

99

[Jmazzocchi]

Oops...and here are the links:

Chapter 21: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_21_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 22: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_22_hamilton_128kb.mp3

Chapter 23: https://librivox.org/uploads/alg1001/theodoresavage_23_hamilton_128kb.mp3