Once again, Sherry, an excellent reading, but again I must encourage you to do a final run-through before submitting. The several repeats indicate that you have not done so. Here are items that need your attention:
1. Intro is beyond the 1-second limit.
2. Cut out repeat at 0.41 "toward Strumalls."
3. At 2:24, it should read "possessing," not "possessed"-- a matter of causation.
4. At 2:44, eliminate repeat "and . . . and that."
5. Eliminate repeat at 2:59: "I half expected."
6. At 3:50, eliminate "that night" repeat.
7. The word "bespattering" at 4:54 is not all there.
8. At 5:06, "walking" makes more sense.
9. At 5:47, the omitted "and" interferes with the whole sense here.
10. At 6:21, eliminate random noise.
11. At 6:35, "paroxysm" is clipped.
12. At 6:59, eliminate repeat: "I made endless."
13. At 7:16, eliminate repeat of "I hunted up."
14. At 8:16, it should read "her ghost," not "she."
15. At 9:32, it should be plural "weeks." This last one may seem innocuous, but it sort of stood out, so I have mentioned it.
As I have indicated, your voice and sense of the story are excellent, but you can see when you go back to these moments that these errors interfere with the enjoyment--it is a rough draft, not a finished product. You will get it worked out. Don't be discouraged. Yours, Jim