COMPLETE [SOLO]A Broken Bond by Nicholas Carter-mas
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Thanks for letting me know about the introductory information. PL Okay for Chapter 3.
Lora
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Hello--
Chapter #4 is PL Okay. It's going well, Geoff!
Lora
Chapter #4 is PL Okay. It's going well, Geoff!
Lora
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PL Okay for Chapter 5. Lora
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Hi Geoff,
For Chapter 6 there are two PL notes--please review/fix if you agree. At 5:30 the phrase ...he snarled, "You would, you would!" should be "You would, would you!" and at 7:05 in the phrase "...he felt a strange admiration.....loyalty..." the word "unflattering" should be changed to "unfaltering."
Thanks,
Lora
For Chapter 6 there are two PL notes--please review/fix if you agree. At 5:30 the phrase ...he snarled, "You would, you would!" should be "You would, would you!" and at 7:05 in the phrase "...he felt a strange admiration.....loyalty..." the word "unflattering" should be changed to "unfaltering."
Thanks,
Lora
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Hello Geoff,
Please tell me if these PL notes are okay--I don't want to be too picky or detailed. I will continue as I am doing now if you would like. Whatever you think is fine with me.
For Chapter 7:
4:07 "beside" should be "behind" in "...took his seat behind the desk.
6:06 change "standing" to "stamping" in "...stamping ground"
6:56 "That was..." should be "That's" in "That's very interesting..."
8:49 change "played" to "playing" in "playing over his caller's face."
Many thanks,
Lora
Please tell me if these PL notes are okay--I don't want to be too picky or detailed. I will continue as I am doing now if you would like. Whatever you think is fine with me.
For Chapter 7:
4:07 "beside" should be "behind" in "...took his seat behind the desk.
6:06 change "standing" to "stamping" in "...stamping ground"
6:56 "That was..." should be "That's" in "That's very interesting..."
8:49 change "played" to "playing" in "playing over his caller's face."
Many thanks,
Lora
Hi Lora,ADKreader1122 wrote: ↑November 28th, 2020, 1:40 pm Hello Geoff,
Please tell me if these PL notes are okay--I don't want to be too picky or detailed. I will continue as I am doing now if you would like. Whatever you think is fine with me.
For Chapter 7:
4:07 "beside" should be "behind" in "...took his seat behind the desk.
6:06 change "standing" to "stamping" in "...stamping ground"
6:56 "That was..." should be "That's" in "That's very interesting..."
8:49 change "played" to "playing" in "playing over his caller's face."
Many thanks,
Lora
I have updated the file with my changes ready for your to check . On the second one I did say stamping ground but it was not very clear so good work in picking that up.
Now onto recording some more
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Chapter 7 is PL Okay, Geoff.
Lora
Lora