oooh this is a creepy one. And the book is finally mentioned a bit more in detail. I really wonder what the text could be that would drive people crazy. I guess it will never be explained really in this book. But the "not knowing" also enhances the horror somehow. I really loved this story.Shalott wrote: ↑September 10th, 2019, 1:26 pmand Section 6
this one is a long one, but it has a neat Easter egg in it
> at 28:41-28:54: “If I went away she might either fall ill, recover, and marry some Eddie Burke, or she might recklessly or deliberately go and do something foolish. On the other hand, if she tired of me, then her whole life would be before her” - ok I hear some bells jingling here in the background, is that the Easter Egg you were speaking of ? What happened here and why did you choose to leave them in ?
Well, apart from that, there is no error at all in the text. Well done for such a huge section. I suppose you chose to leave the jingling in, so I won't put that up for PL notes. Anyway, it's not disturbing the understanding of the text, so it's ok. I'll mark it PL ok.
Good job ! Looking forward to the next chapter.